Me & A Bird on a Wire

me and a bird on a wire 

squaring it away

song birds stuck

 on the lime without a life

fighting for freedom

                       with plumed feathers

crying for dark doors to open 

                           so the nightingale can sing

'not ask for much' I screech,

                                             what about breathe to be seen

reality sweats the behavior 

only to be a fairy tale

I sacrifice my own dignity

                   for others orbit of expanse

i meditate high on the balance

                for fear of mutilation

boundaries close the sky

                                            to a mortar of cloud's formation

amends never tasted so bitter

 as the acrid promise

I am alone perched

                          and I contain so many others

my footing has braced 

a thousand sad sails and smiles

helpless I flutter desperately

                             for the cage is in the distance 

the release still a fall from grace,

 the distance weeping

for struggling echo's which

                                       embrace a sublime sad song

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Reviews

[redflutterby]

How did you know that on this rainy day this is exactly how I feel. The tightness in my chest and inability of my legs to move all signs of talons grasping the wire for dear life. A bird that has lost its song for trying to sing too many songs. You write what stirs in my soul...

[Frieda P]

Sometimes you just feel it in your bones, glad it was affecting dear friend, to better days.....xo

[KeeD]

Paints such a vivid picture of entrapment and shows the expressiveness of the authors point of view. To fly away or to face loneliness that has been dealt with for so long your words give life to this sad song. I loved it. Favorited. Have I told you you're a genius?

[Frieda P]

No, not lately, I expect it sky writing. ;-P
Thanks Kee x

[. : r E L I E V E : . ..]

a life from a bird in cage
this reminds me how trapped everyone is
we're different but society won't accept us

WE MUST (NOT) CONFORM

[Frieda P]

Now I feel as though I'm at a Peace rally...thanks for reading.

[. : r E L I E V E : . .]

i remember when i was a peace rally the teachers never approved it but it was awesome

[Emerald Seas]

Compelling write on self-sacrifice and persistence for the well-being of others. A difficult tightrope to balance. I think as mothers we understand this is part of our life no matter what. Yet, there are so many other times this comes into play. Service to others, the war-fighter and their families, walking away from a love as to not destroy families, marriages, etc., and the grind of doing all that you can to give your children a better life. An excellent writing!

[Frieda P]

Yes, the mommy role is superpower and with it comes greatest highs and lows at times, the joys always sparkle but that awesome responsibility weighs heavily. Thanks for your insightful review!

[Night]

...deep write my friend, well expressed feelings.

[Frieda P]

...much appreciated David, thanks my friend.

[Night]

hey...where ya been...you ok...?

[Frieda P]

I will be, sometimes life gets in the way, you understand that, right? ;-)

[Night]

...lol Oh yes I do...=)

[Frieda P]

ha I figured you would! ;-P x

[Annabelle Lee]

so much to think aboit.... but it isnt tht hard to peel bck the wrapper on this piece. Bravo.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Annabelle.

[Lover Of Words]

This is beautiful

[Frieda P]

Grazie Kelsey...x

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The quite serene wording is in stark contrast to how up front your flow and imagery are, it paints rivers in ones mind, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for this lovely review.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

your welcome

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sometimes we can muster up courage to take a chance when we get support from someone close to us... I really enjoyed this poem.

[Frieda P]

I'm so glad you did Dale, thanks!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I can see who your inspiration is for this poem, although I'm not really familiar so I'll take a look at the video soon, but I really like the poem adn the appreciate the way you have allowed us to feel the actions fo the bird, plenty of clever details used, great work Freida!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Sheema, it's not really necessary to listen to the video since you got my poetry! He just happens to be a favorite poet of mine, and he sings it so well.

[An owl on the moon]

What a haunting vision of a world hanging by a thread... melancholy music in bittersweet birdsong. Love the depth and richness you paint.

[Frieda P]

And I'm jazzing on your review, thanks Craig! :-)