Poetic Retraction

Shall I take back all my poetic injustice

does it not fit in your realm of meter and tack

my rhythm seeks that of a different drummer

another lover of a different color perhaps

is it not presumptuous to say it has not merit

my madness grants me permission to steer

words convoluted and distortion, beware

when all is said and done, no one has won

words are words that affect one another

be they warm, or square, they sit and despair

what will people think of me, naked and abject

stir them in a pot of reality with wretched added

or add sweet kisses and adulation for all to see

cheap, vulgar, saccharin, or beguiling illusions

they're all the delusions of the poets alchemy

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

poetry means many different things to everyone. I have found for myself, that the only way to write is to write to express myself, and to hell with what anyone else thinks of it. There are enough restrictions, rules and constraints in real life...this is my imaginary world, and the only rules are of my own choosing, and the only one who needs pleasing is me. Poetry??? Make of it what you need and want it to be.

[Frieda P]

Hear Hear

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This has a Shakespearian flavour to it as it hides its hurt in a clever and cloying mix of poetic questions.

[Frieda P]

wooo, could you repeat that please John ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Are you deaf tonight my dear! lol

[Frieda P]

I'm trying out selective hearing, I heard it's a hit with you guys! ;-P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh sexist beastly lady!

[Frieda P]

LOL!!

[Geon Quuin]

One of the greatest examples who doesn't really rely on poetic rules is T.S. Eliot

[David Scott]

You could take it back, but the gesture would reak of insincerity. The world would not remember either way. When they do choose to remember it will be the "cheap, vulgar, caccharin, or beguiling illusions" of the false idol they dreated of your work.
A poets word and not "cheap", they are bought with pain, blood, and abuse, or shared from bliss beyond value.
Poets are not "vulgar '. The words are replicated from the transparnt vision of the very inner nature of humanity. The skin is just removed to show the "beguiling illusions" that everyone know is not reality.
I will give this a kiss, but it will not be sweet with adulation. No. Thsi kiss begs the thrust of passion and the bite of persistence.
Retract nothing!
Loved it.

[Ahmad Cox]

I really liked this one. You are right about that. Writing shouldn't be about sticking to a certain meter or time or phrasing its about expressing emotions however it happens to come out,

[Frieda P]

I so agree, obviously some are more exquisite than other's, but even the poorly written poem can extract emotion...I think that's the true meaning of Poetry, feelings flowing fluid from one's pen into another's hear and soul. ;-)

[Frieda P]

ha, I may even just quote myself there! ;-D

[Frieda P]

and that was heart x

[KAOlmsted]

Oh...I had something to say then I read the review MKS gave and it fell out my head and all I could think was...we defecate words...some words stink prettier than others. These stink pretty ;-)

[Frieda P]

hahaha thanks I think! ;-P
when it comes back to you, I'd let to hear the original unstinky thought

[KAOlmsted]

Godspeed, original thought...I better read it again *laugh*

[Frieda P]

haha I don't know if it's me and lack of sleep or are you extraordinarily funnier today??

[KAOlmsted]

To be quite honest, I think I'm still a little drunk from last night xD

[Frieda P]

wow drunk makes you funny, it makes me stupid!

[KAOlmsted]

Residual drunk makes me sleepy, which is why I'm still eating breakfast at 11:30 ;-)

[Frieda P]

sometimes it makes me horny too but I'm not gonna put that out there... ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

No. Best not to say that. Good thing it just appeared in a bubble over your head ;-)

[Frieda P]

geez is there no privacy in this place? ;-P

[Geon Quuin]

privacy is just a modern invention by today's society. But it's kind of slowly disintegrating to nothingness in the internet.

[KAOlmsted]

O.O

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Yes a poet swallows words for breakfast, lunch and dinner. Until all that survives is the poetry, the words are just the process.

[Frieda P]

Why didn't I just say that? ;-P

[Geon Quuin]

I eat meat as well. cause steaks are awesome and delicious.