...another day in Shangrila

half tongue in cheek...

Powdered sugar streets

candy coated mountains

remembering when 

life was so simple

celestial fireworks

 star beams blew magenta

woke up this morning... 

where has lucidity gone

what happened to my

 youthful expectations

stuck in the brackish ooze

 the cuckoo ate my dignity

repenting dirty laundry,

 lost in muck of love analysis

inevitability of every day

granite nuances fetter cinereal 

 

brain charger pistons low

 devoid, half fried, half baked

sparks lost their intent

 toilet flushes came to visit

dragged the hideous demons

Cinderella and Georgie Porgy

 over for a play date

just another day in Xanadu

 eating crow and playing chess

checkmate and other

 suppositions came a callin'

dank days turned parched tsunami 

rained on my parade

my best fiend is a demon king

sire alcohol and his wife Margeherita

i'm too early for death,

 too late for child's delectation

random sarcastic and morose

  in place of jazz enchantments

first row tickets for a dream expired

thank my benign stars for poetry

 keeps my demiurgic distillation flowing

if not for that that great AWOL 

resident bedlum bughouse a certainty

    just another day in paradise

 *LALALALALALA*      

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Another day in where? That brought a smile to my face ;D I think the revisions are great, Shangrila is really nice...as I mentioned earlier, I really like the swirl of images and emotions that run through the piece, and the seamlessness with which you brought them all together...another day, another gem ;)

[Frieda P]

Thanks, glad you approve k...I thought Shangrila sounded more like the jungle I live in! ;-D

[kublakhan27]

The first thing that came to my mind was a song of the same name by ELO...it's a pretty but mournful song and it lines up with your sentiments a fair bit, or mine upon reading this one :) I don't know if I live in a jungle but I've got one living in me, somewhere between my ears ;)

[Ahmad Cox]

I have to admit that last line made me laugh to myself.

[Frieda P]

ha you laughing at me, or are you familiar with it? lol

[Claire Twinn]

Sounds part heaven and part hell, intensely absurd and completely unique. I too like to spend time with that fun gal Margherita, but damn that cuckoo!

[Frieda P]

LOL your review is funnier than my poetry! ;-)

[ms. barrie]

This is just simply creatively amazing! very unique choice of words and your arrangement of them in each stanza, every word flowing with the rhyme. this is a poem that makes you ponder, and let's your imagination drift, brilliantly penned, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

ha not so creative, that's the way it really is! ;-P

[ms. barrie]

ooooh i see. sorry my brain took a vacation and didn't leave me a calling card :)

[Frieda P]

ha must be going around, same thing happens to me all the time! ;-)

[ms. barrie]

Me: "do i even have a brain?" lol

[Frieda P]

sure we all do, sometimes it just works against us...we need some buttons to push it back into gear, or perhaps a 'delete' in some cases! lol

[ms. barrie]

i think my buttons/gears are glitched up lol :)

[Frieda P]

Oh gawd, then there's no hope for you my dear! ;-P

[ms. barrie]

no i am a lost cause, i should just drown myself in my coffee and cheesecake, na kidding! i'll get there eventually. i like taking the long road. i'm masochistic , obviously. Thank you for your lovely reviews and the laughs, Frieda, pen on, xoxo ;)

[Frieda P]

Never a lost cause...long way is sometimes the best way, you get to enjoy the scenery. ;-) xo

[ms. barrie]

very true, and also, pick up some flowers along the way :) xoxo, have a wonderful day you ....drink that chamomile tea, get some sleep!

[Frieda P]

ha sleep is for p*****s, thanks you too hon! :-)

[ms. barrie]

guess i am a p***y then (leo) haha. cause i got some...(sleep) :))

[s y e]

Heheh. Das it's super! This was so creative!!! Amazing imagery!!!

Well done deary, your super super coolies! xox

[Frieda P]

Welcome to my world, did you bring wine? ;-P

[s y e]

Well duh I did! I got it right here ;-) The finest wine in the whole of mehico ;-P

[Frieda P]

wooo is it too early to party hardy? ;-P

[s y e]

Hell no!!!! Says who!! Lets this get the party started!!! ;-) *opens bottle of wine and sings songs*

[Frieda P]

throws caution to the wind, dancing on tabletops!! ha you're a bad influence !!

[s y e]

Hahaha. I can imagine you dancing on a tabletop. Ooooh, that is funnaaaay! :-D

[Circe]

love the outpour of crazy thoughts and imagery coming together with creativity and wit.. super cool Frieda.. enjoyed the trip!

[Frieda P]

haha always welcomed to my world Circe! Thanks.

[Michael G.]

Sometimes it certainly seems that way. I'm not sure I should thank you for taking us on this dizzy trip around your world or not... but I can certainly relate to it. Well done. LALALALALALA

[Frieda P]

haha I thought that was you in the room next to mine. ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

I haven't watched television in ages (our DLP chip went screwy; I've got the white screen of death) but tonight I got to see the Weather Channel at the laundromat (I know, right? It was a big night for kimmer *laugh*) and it said there's some snow up there...powdered sugar streets made me think of that. Sorry. Tangent territory. I liked this a lot...so much to think about...it almost reversed the effect my ni-night candy should be having on me ;-)

[Frieda P]

ha, candy again...you're big on candy tonight! Yes, snow here, not too bad though, it's just so freakin cold, no gloating ms floridian...glad you enjoyed my lunacy by the way.... ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Hey, this time last year I was in Alaska, AND I grew up in upstste NY, getting all of that lake effect snow...so, I totally feel for you. And you know what? We're having a cold snap. Going to only be around 55 degrees tomorrow. Brrr ;-)

[Frieda P]

Oh boy, you're lucky I like you the kimmer.........

[KAOlmsted]

:-D

[rnuff]

This is wonderful, enjoyable read

[Frieda P]

haha glad you enjoyed partaking in my madness! ;-D

[LA Lorena]

LALALALALALA!!!! I knew it! It's about me, isn't it! ;) :P

[Frieda P]

HAHAHAHA, how did you guess that?! ;-P

[LA Lorena]

LALALALALALA!!!!!! It had my name all over it at the end!

[Frieda P]

DOH LA, I got that!!! IT IS ABOUT YOU, YA LUNATIC!! ;-p

[LA Lorena]

LALALALA....hey, wait a minute. I almost feel like I've somehow been slighted. ;)

[Frieda P]

ha should I add shoes, will you feel better? ;-)

[Sethnicity]

HAHA! I knew you'd think this song was about You!....

[Annabelle Lee]

haha. wait. shangrila? the first time id heard that term was on one of the jokers cards... people really say that?

[Frieda P]

haha do I look like 'normal' people, c'mon, get real Annabelle! ;-P

[Frieda P]

It was more for shytes and giggles, Paradise sounded too boring ;-)

[Annabelle Lee]

good point. hah.

[Frieda P]

lmao!