Raven Bluff

Wrote this whilst listening to Ghost Song by Max Ablitzer, music included. Hope you enjoy the music as much as I did.

I flew with the dark raven

   for he was the only one

   who could taste or see

   such  insanely sweet madness in me

   he perched himself right astride

   without cawing a sound

   naught a lecture to take care

Mockingly looming overhead

   he stared me straight in the eye

So smooth and lovingly lush he sailed 

   soared within me to new heights

   before we burst into fluid flight 

I took him in languidly 

   hauntingly mysterious elixir

   a cryptic spirit unto himself

Cracked half a vitriolic sad smile

   whilst he prepared me for sin

Knocking back at my door

  to taunt me raving yet afresh

  he sing songs his intoxication into me,

  then takes me for a mystical rendezvous

  raven's song so tastefully contrived

              we sing together,

                           twisted in consumption

                                                   the dark raven in me

                                                                    never judges  

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Mystical, black ravens taking you out on ethereal dates and slowly embedding itself into your soul, becoming forever a part of you (hence the singing together in the end, and the dark raven IN you never judging). What a dark centerpiece for a love felt by a person trying to empty themself.. Well done.

[Frieda P]

You dug deep for this one Tai, always love to read your interpretations, glad you enjoyed this one...thanks so much.

[kublakhan27]

Maybe I won't be so spooked by the sight of a single raven near my window now haha This paints an enticing portrait indeed ;)

[Frieda P]

Weird, was just thinking about you...nah ravens are our friends. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Hehe like the Raven? Never mind ;) I actually don't mind ravens...I am a ridiculously superstitious person, but I'm not so wary of them as some other things lol

[Frieda P]

:-D ha I was missing you making me laugh all the time silly boy! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

:D You must have sensed my deficiencies in the laughter department as of late...thankfully the effect is mutual ;)

[Frieda P]

we allow for minor adjustments here ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Yes, which I am certainly grateful for ;)

[Frieda P]

ha I need an attitude adjustment daily, sometimes on the hour ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha yes, I can sympathize with that, unfortunately I can't be bothered with hourly chores ;P

[kublakhan27]

Hourly chores as they pertain to me, that is haha ;P

[David Scott]

I do not personally relate to having a part of me that never judges myself...
Must be nice! ha
The poem was a bit like a floert with the dark side. I could hear Star Wars music in my head. Odd I know...but.
"I took him in
hauntingly mysterious elixir
a cryptic spirit unto himself
Cracked half a knowing sad smile"
This part hit home. You chose "him" and this was interesting to me.
then felt "elixer" yet the smile was "sad for the "knowing" of this song...
How exactly is one "prepared for sin"? It begs one question the original supposition does it not?
Well crafted, this potion of words!

[Frieda P]

Actually I wouldn't know. And If I told you, I'd have to kill you. ;-) ...what the heck is a floert by the way?

[David Scott]

oops. How do you even tolerate reading me? ha. "flirt".
Tryibng to type between patients... ha

[David Scott]

trying...

[Frieda P]

Isn't that illegal? ;-P

[Relic]

Another good one Frieda. Both poem and video are creative and dark.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Relics, glad you liked it.

[Dream Weaver]

I wrote something about a Raven as well, but I do enjoyed this much better!
Nice work Frieda. ;-)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Dream, will have to check it out.

[Dream Weaver]

;-)

[Seanh12]

Wow this poem is very good. I like raven the bird is mystery and has no fear. love the poem and the video. The vidoe and song match the tone of the poem. It would be very cool to be a raven and roam around rooms as him to see what a raven is seeing. Well done on this beauiful excellent piece of poetry. It is very dark i love it. It is very well written.

[Frieda P]

Whew, this review is very good, much appreciated, thanks for reading me! ;-)

[Seanh12]

its ok you are welcome. It wa a plesure to read. Really loved reading it. Well done

[Becky C Strukamp]

Excellent! I could almost imagine a song here, and flight of the raven,

"we sing together" "he never judges" these two lines are perfect. Its like we can all get along and protect each other.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Becky, I'm so glad you liked it. :-)

[Baby Ricochet]

I love Ravens. They stare at you like "what the hell do you want" great poem Frieda

[Frieda P]

ha, yeah they do...thanks Baby.

[LA Lorena]

This was a very cool write FP. You seem to be on quite a roll of late! The muse has not only struck, but appears to be lashing you constantly! Keep doing what you're doing, as it seems to be working!

[Frieda P]

OMG are you crazy, the kiss of death for a poet!! Thanks ;-P

[KeeD]

" for he was the only one
who could taste or see
such insanely sweet madness in me" this truly makes me cheek bones hurt as I can't stop smiling at how brilliant the meaning and words chosen to describe it are.
It's like an angel in a nightmare.. he watches over you, guides you, becomes part of you, before you realize it he saves you. Wow you've taken the music and added life to it with these words.. you've given it a story. This was legendary by all means and one of the most creative pieces i've ever read. Beautiful .. just beautiful. You're able to create poetry out of any inspiration. Give you a picture and you create art, give you music you create art. Professionalism at it's core.

[Frieda P]

You do give great review Kee! I'm grooving on this big time ;-)
Thanks so much, I was hoping you'd enjoy this one!

[KeeD]

haha when you linked me the song through a comment earlier I couldn't stop listening to it what an enchanting song but now I can't stop reading this :)

[Frieda P]

ahhh, read me Kee, read me ;-) xo

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the Raven. A bird of mystery and no fear. I like the story and the good video. Would be cool to roam with the raven and see what the raven is seeing. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Yes, Ravens are mysterious birds to say the least, thanks so much for your review John.