I love how you use the language. Title caught my attention. The poem took me to some deep and powerful emotion.
"caged dancers can't take flight'
When the will to fight is gone. What is left? I like the closing lines to the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks so much Coyote, glad you see where I was going with that one.
Reminds me of pieces of my life. How blind love is to start with and how easily we dive in not realizing that we will soon be suffocated and buried under its terrible weight. As usual Frieda an Awesome write. I love your way with words.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thanks so much Carolann, not sure how I missed this one...lovely review.
I love how you use the language. Title caught my attention. The poem took me to some deep and powerful emotion.
"caged dancers can't take flight'
When the will to fight is gone. What is left? I like the closing lines to the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks so much Coyote, glad you see where I was going with that one.
And this is how love destroys us! Your last lines make me want to come up for air!
We should know not to go in past the flag line, but we often do not obey the warnings and get caught in the undertow, the rip tides, the end all of the relationship, or I should say, "should be the end all", and oh how high is the price we pay for not heeding the warnings, for not listening to sense and sensibility!
Amazing imagery my friend!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Love this review, I think I like your review better than my poem! ;-)
Thanks my friend!
Hahah, I'm so glad I found this community, there's alot of talented writers here! My writing is so j.. read moreHahah, I'm so glad I found this community, there's alot of talented writers here! My writing is so juvenile compared to this, but i feel like there's alot to be learned here!
11 Years Ago
the last stanza is great
11 Years Ago
thanks, yep, lots of talented poets abide, I've learned a lot in the short two months I've been here.. read morethanks, yep, lots of talented poets abide, I've learned a lot in the short two months I've been here myself.
I don't know what to say, truly...this is another favorite. To drown in waters too blue, too close, is suffocating. Your last stanza is brilliant. Emotive writing at its finest, this is superb penning.
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..