Water Boarding Love

Water Boarding Love

A Poem by Frieda P

you unfold me try to mold me
my breath stilled under water

once upon a time 

we fell into each other's spell
dropped from the cliffs
 of sightless starry bits
rhythmical fine foot forward 

i stood tall until 

i tripped into your darkness
the lure stifled 
smothered in clouds of twisted taffeta
caged dancers can't take flight
your pressing melody now suffocating

magnetic beauty of blindness

now you weigh heavy on my soul
third times not a swim in the park
your shattered mirror image 
tarnished and without reflectors

I read you in braille
now i drown in your 
glaring reverberations

© 2013 Frieda P


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I love how you use the language. Title caught my attention. The poem took me to some deep and powerful emotion.
"caged dancers can't take flight'
When the will to fight is gone. What is left? I like the closing lines to the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Coyote, glad you see where I was going with that one.



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Reminds me of pieces of my life. How blind love is to start with and how easily we dive in not realizing that we will soon be suffocated and buried under its terrible weight. As usual Frieda an Awesome write. I love your way with words.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Carolann, not sure how I missed this one...lovely review.
Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

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Nice write but then I've come to expect that from you so I'll just say that this is brilliant and be done with it...amazing write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

ha geez the pressure, thanks so much!! ;-)
I love how you use the language. Title caught my attention. The poem took me to some deep and powerful emotion.
"caged dancers can't take flight'
When the will to fight is gone. What is left? I like the closing lines to the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Coyote, glad you see where I was going with that one.
And this is how love destroys us! Your last lines make me want to come up for air!
We should know not to go in past the flag line, but we often do not obey the warnings and get caught in the undertow, the rip tides, the end all of the relationship, or I should say, "should be the end all", and oh how high is the price we pay for not heeding the warnings, for not listening to sense and sensibility!
Amazing imagery my friend!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Love this review, I think I like your review better than my poem! ;-)
Thanks my friend!
Thank you, I can't stop reading all your poems!


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TillingBuckle50

11 Years Ago

Hahah, I'm so glad I found this community, there's alot of talented writers here! My writing is so j.. read more
TillingBuckle50

11 Years Ago

the last stanza is great
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

thanks, yep, lots of talented poets abide, I've learned a lot in the short two months I've been here.. read more
I can't think of words to describe this poem. XD It's amazing. ;) Stupendous piece!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Wooo, I like this review! ;-)
"I read you in braille"
Wow!
Such blind groping! Time to move on :)
Very cutting, very nice!


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

haha now you're speaking my language....
Ayvid N

11 Years Ago

:)
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

:-D
The last stanza Is great. Good job frieda.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Baby.
I don't know what to say, truly...this is another favorite. To drown in waters too blue, too close, is suffocating. Your last stanza is brilliant. Emotive writing at its finest, this is superb penning.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thank you kindly my friend.
great as usual

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Annabelle Lee.

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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