Quintessence

I breathe you like

 fire and flowers

your sweet and burning essentia

you flow through me resolute

whilst my frenzied

 peak pulsates

your body eases into my being

it settles in

 crystal pools of clarity

seen through

 smoky salted tears

swells the

 unspoken tenderness 

you lavish me with abundances

bursts a 

symphony of exhalations

sun and moon

 rise simultaneous

lulled into effete

 paroxysm's embrace

I exhale the essence of your crest

Reviews

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

This is my kind of piece, it has jazz and sweetness, and I like how it hangs on the page!

I breathe you like fire and flowers
your sweet and burning essentia
you flow through me resolute

swells the unspoken tenderness
you lavish me with abundances

[Frieda P]

Thanks a friend of mine sent me that artwork with the exhale of flowers and smoke, asked me to write something for it, this was the result....

[Annabelle Lee]

Wooooo. sounds fun

[Frieda P]

ha should you even be reading this missy ;-P

[Annabelle Lee]

Shhhh... don't tell mom! haha

[Frieda P]

:D mum's the word....

[Butch Decatoria]

Who are you and where did you come from? I haven't enjoyed reading poetry in a while in here - you have a gift . and I agree of Lorena - very erotic and sexual undertones -- LOVE IT!

[Frieda P]

Frieda from joisey, nice to meet you. ;-)
Thanks for the excellent review...

[LA Lorena]

This was almost downright erotic! ;) Fine penning frieda p.

[Frieda P]

woooo high praise from you, thanks LA!

[Michael G.]

Okay... ah, got a cigarette? I think I need one.

[Frieda P]

haha funny....thanks!

[Baby Ricochet]

Pretty good

[Frieda P]

;-) thanks

[luviva]

wow..
thats what i call a flow!!
baby that had structure and the words just slipped off my tongue into ma veins!!
great work my dear!!

[Frieda P]

wooooo, I like that! thank you!

[luviva]

yeh./..tryin' out the american way .. u get me?

[Frieda P]

If that means you're nutters like the rest of us, yep. ;-P

[luviva]

hahha..
maybe iam never knw..

[David Scott]

Me no get big words... ha
Love the sense of experienceing life in this poem.
Not my favorite read in how it feels as in the meter and how it fell off my tongue, but I enjoyed the visualization of thought.

[Frieda P]

ha didn't want to be so bold as to use the 'O' word so 'paroxysm'...you never had an attack before? ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A sensual and lovely write. The final lines are akin to the climax followed by the feeling of completness and wellbeing when you cum.

[Frieda P]

Good, wasn't sure it'd work...thanks John.