Cutlass

Making this one an interactive poem, which ending do you like best, cast your votes! lol Is it door #1 or #2? ;-)

You plunged your dagger in so deep

   it had cut me to the core

the blood trickled to your feet

   you said you required nothing more

Dagger ceased to be a useful tool

   once it dulled and spread itself so thin

shiny wore off as it sank its tip into a cesspool 

The moral to this tragic beat

as you can probably guess

tis don't s**t where you eat

                     or

The moral to the story

could be simply learned

Slice and dice is so nice

when the onus has been earned

Reviews

[KeeD]

Wow profound, I love how you circled such intense imagery around the phrase don't s**t where you eat. I pictured the dagger, I pictured the cut so deep, blood trickling down feet..the dagger being used to inflict so much hurt till it's nothing but scrapped dirt and then the different perspectives where the dagger could be heartless stabs of a man ego, etc.. there are many ways to perceive this short marvelous piece and that just proves that it's brilliant writing.

[Frieda P]

J'adore....!! I love how your mind works, you always catch where I'm going... ;-)

[KeeD]

for real ? I just sometimes think i'm crazy and perceive the total opposite of what you try to represent through your poems but you're to sweet to tell me other wise haha

[Frieda P]

lol, well, the crazy part is true! I'll let you know when you've gone off the beaten path. ;-)

[KeeD]

Haha :P you're cute.

[Frieda P]

;-)

[rnuff]

enjoyed especially the last line, cute

[Frieda P]

I'm terrible at rhyming but I think this one did okay, thanks Shorty!

[rnuff]

you did a wonderful job of rhyming

[Frieda P]

Danke :-)

[Lover Of Words]

Very Good!! :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kelsey, I didn't forget you, just got lost ;-)

[Lover Of Words]

lol i know you didnt forge t about me haha

[Frieda P]

WC needs to get the kinks out, maybe a shot of tequila! ha

[Lover Of Words]

Haha i know right?

[Frieda P]

:-)

[Lover Of Words]

;-)