Wow profound, I love how you circled such intense imagery around the phrase don't s**t where you eat. I pictured the dagger, I pictured the cut so deep, blood trickling down feet..the dagger being used to inflict so much hurt till it's nothing but scrapped dirt and then the different perspectives where the dagger could be heartless stabs of a man ego, etc.. there are many ways to perceive this short marvelous piece and that just proves that it's brilliant writing.
J'adore....!! I love how your mind works, you always catch where I'm going... ;-)
11 Years Ago
for real ? I just sometimes think i'm crazy and perceive the total opposite of what you try to repre.. read morefor real ? I just sometimes think i'm crazy and perceive the total opposite of what you try to represent through your poems but you're to sweet to tell me other wise haha
Ending # 2 as I like putting the old one two punch to wrap it up - slice and dice! That dagger even though dulled can still cut the ways it needs to when it's given a reason to do so.
I like the opportunity to choose the ending. So, which ending did you go wit first?
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Actually the second was first, I ended up posting the second, then the kimmer said she wanted to rea.. read moreActually the second was first, I ended up posting the second, then the kimmer said she wanted to read the alternative, and so this is what happened? You following me Sheila? ;-)
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that damn kimmer...if I ever figure who that little trouble maker is...
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Gotta cha!!
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OMG the Queen is MIA?
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nah...present and accounted for...just wrapping things up, thought I'd stir the pot before I go :-D .. read morenah...present and accounted for...just wrapping things up, thought I'd stir the pot before I go :-D xoxo
So out of character for you, you feeling alright? :D
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Ha! Yes...I can sleep easy tonight with that final helping of Frieda sarcasm all warm and fuzzy on m.. read moreHa! Yes...I can sleep easy tonight with that final helping of Frieda sarcasm all warm and fuzzy on me...love it, lady.
Ah, an interesting read! I like the first few lines. In real life do we recognize what serves as the dagger? Sometimes it is sharp words, silence, trying too hard, or not trying at all... or not caring either way. Intriguing poem
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Okay, you're the second person today, who've I read their profound serious works that totally blew m.. read moreOkay, you're the second person today, who've I read their profound serious works that totally blew me away, and of all my stuff, you read this crap! lol thanks :-)
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lol - well, to be honest, I haven't seen you around until the past day or two, and this popped up on.. read morelol - well, to be honest, I haven't seen you around until the past day or two, and this popped up on the sidebar for "related writing" while I was reading something else. :) I'll have to go over and check out more of your work. Happy?
And just to ease your mind, I am far from a decent poet. I can only write what grabs me - unfortunat.. read moreAnd just to ease your mind, I am far from a decent poet. I can only write what grabs me - unfortunately that has been emotionally for ages now. I'm working on changing that! :)
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haha, now you're just trying to pacify me! ;-P
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lol - not at all. After I break away to have a little dinner, your work is first on my list (I have .. read morelol - not at all. After I break away to have a little dinner, your work is first on my list (I have no list - so, maybe I am pacifying just a little)
I have this recurrent line from some song that I can't remember that goes "it's cruel to be kind" and when I think of my ex, I think of a butterknife. This was a poignant read.
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Thanks my friend, who's holding the butter knife is what I want to know?
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Well I'm not one to wield daggers, though sometimes I'd like to be more dangerous to the fairer sex,.. read moreWell I'm not one to wield daggers, though sometimes I'd like to be more dangerous to the fairer sex, maybe you have some gut tips for me?
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Two rules and you've got it made, we're always right, and you need to make us feel adored, oh, and t.. read moreTwo rules and you've got it made, we're always right, and you need to make us feel adored, oh, and take out the freakin garbage! ;-)
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I'm thinking of trying to be more aloof (like the male version of being a b***h). My pattern Frieda .. read moreI'm thinking of trying to be more aloof (like the male version of being a b***h). My pattern Frieda is I'm too nice, so I need a reconditioning program that leads in the opposite direction to restore my integrity, respectability and gender power dynamics. Maybe I should take a course in queer theory.
Dye my hair orange and proclaim myself a feminist?
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*rolling my eyes* yeah that'll work, try it and report back, that aloof stuff only works when you're.. read more*rolling my eyes* yeah that'll work, try it and report back, that aloof stuff only works when you're a bad boy, and it only works for so long, just be yourself, without orange hair! You put up a facade, women fall in love with that and then it's all kaplooie after that cause you can't keep it up...well, you know what I mean. ;-)
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yeah no bad boy blood here, I think I'll get a golden retriever one day and call it quits.
Slice and dice is so nice
when the onus has been earned
i love these lines, rage is dripping from that poem and i'm loveing it!, i could pretty much say that about a certain person in my mind XD, great write! deffinatly a favourite of mine!
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..