Cutlass

Cutlass

A Poem by Frieda P
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Making this one an interactive poem, which ending do you like best, cast your votes! lol Is it door #1 or #2? ;-)

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You plunged your dagger in so deep
   it had cut me to the core
the blood trickled to your feet
   you said you required nothing more
Dagger ceased to be a useful tool
   once it dulled and spread itself so thin
shiny wore off as it sank its tip into a cesspool 

The moral to this tragic beat
as you can probably guess
tis don't s**t where you eat

                     or


The moral to the story
could be simply learned
Slice and dice is so nice
when the onus has been earned




© 2013 Frieda P


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Wow profound, I love how you circled such intense imagery around the phrase don't s**t where you eat. I pictured the dagger, I pictured the cut so deep, blood trickling down feet..the dagger being used to inflict so much hurt till it's nothing but scrapped dirt and then the different perspectives where the dagger could be heartless stabs of a man ego, etc.. there are many ways to perceive this short marvelous piece and that just proves that it's brilliant writing.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

lol, well, the crazy part is true! I'll let you know when you've gone off the beaten path. ;-)
KeeD

11 Years Ago

Haha :P you're cute.
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

;-)



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I certainly prefer the first version of morality

Posted 11 Years Ago


wow that's interesting. I don't entirely get it, but the imagery is good

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Really, you don't get it? It's about a man that only wants one thing from a woman, then moves on to.. read more
should be "its tip"

but great philosophy here...so true...

once you've abused me enough...there will be nothing left to abuse---

and what goes around comes around.

i love the attitude in this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

thanks for the correction...and the great review jacob.
The first two stanzas were enough to have me clapping my hands with geelful wicked vengeful joy!
I din't get the last two lines though!
But I think I got everything from it that I should anyway!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

You know, Lorena Bobbet, that cut off her husbands penis when she found out he was cheating, and thr.. read more
WOWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

Oooooooft, gave me the heeby jeebies! I could imagine it all!!!! Good job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

ha Ooooooooft, always my fav review!!!
s y e

11 Years Ago

Hehehe. Coolies
Amazing. I like #1 better than #2.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Everyone likes something different, I guess I'll just leave them both up! Thanks. :-)
Mehak Mushtaq

11 Years Ago

Anytime. :)
#2

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Baby, I would have thought you'd go for #1 tbh.
Artwork and words were amazing. Your strong description gave life to the artwork. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Nice review, thanks so much Coyote!
Well if I get a vote... Neither "ending" helps the write.
I would stop without the "moral of the story".
I liked the poem very much otherwise.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

hahahaha, yep you're gifted!
 David Scott

11 Years Ago

Like a skunk is gifted with scent. ;-)
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

yeah that! ;-P
I liked both, #1 was funny, but I think #2 fit better. (: Nice job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

haha, skittles you're wicked! ;-)

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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