I won't dare try decipher this, cos I'll get it wrong. (Remember?) :)
However, the atmosphere and language is dark and pithy, pure and flawed. Stimulating and intense, FP!
If you like, you can change 'left it's mark' to 'left its mark'. You'll be saving an apostrophe and doing your bit to cut down on carbon emissions!
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11 Years Ago
haha you're a funny man C.R. I do that all the time, you'd think I'd learn...there is no wrong and/.. read morehaha you're a funny man C.R. I do that all the time, you'd think I'd learn...there is no wrong and/or right I feel in poetry, once I put it out there it's in your hands, see fit to do with it what you must. All reviews come from our own instigations of lfe. I thank you kindly sir. Caron emissions. ha. ;-)
ohhh frieda,
this is such a sorrowful, so gripping and it has got an edge.
it get your reader involved well to the extent that they can play the scene before their eyes. the imagery is so stroong ,the emotion and sadness is just another thing.
real good. continue writing my friend!!
let your voice be heard.
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11 Years Ago
thanks so much luviva...sometimes these things practically write themselves.
there is obvious damage and pain in this write. your soul, like my heart, needs an enema....you write beautifully, but you seem to have this recurring theme in some of your writes...i suppose it is what gives us our poet wings. pain is excellent fodder for poetry.
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11 Years Ago
So it is quin...very much so. heart and soul 'enema' made me laugh. :D
Thanks for your kind w.. read moreSo it is quin...very much so. heart and soul 'enema' made me laugh. :D
Thanks for your kind words x
Frieda this is one of your really good poems yet again. It is sad though that you cannot move on from the central themes in much of your writing and it will only happen when you decide to eject the past that weighs down your soul and stops you having the hope you need to be whole again.
I wonder if anyone ever said that to Sylvia or Anne Sexton. I write from what I know, it comes from.. read moreI wonder if anyone ever said that to Sylvia or Anne Sexton. I write from what I know, it comes from a gut, I know no other way to write. Thanks John. :-P
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But to help others who have suffered similar fates one must instil hope in them not perpetuate the i.. read moreBut to help others who have suffered similar fates one must instil hope in them not perpetuate the idea that they are eternally damned and will never recover. Writing as a catharsis only works if in doing so one can move on from the trauma and begin to write of survival and growth and the possibilities of fulfilment. Oh and what was the outcome for Sylvia?
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Touche. I realize this comes from a gentle place John. You truly bring tears to my eyes...
Oh this feels like something dark, wrong, something that brought pain of the dull, aching, never ending sort. It sounds like something that people prefer not to speak of ... the unspeakable.
It sounds like the need for ... something to disinfect the soul. I am so sorry that you were able to write this so very well..
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'Disinfect the soul' like that...might have to steal that from you. Thanks, it was a tough write but.. read more'Disinfect the soul' like that...might have to steal that from you. Thanks, it was a tough write but good to get it out there.
ah yes,w****s or this case a w***e. Oh how I adored women like this whwen I was younger,fun,fun,fun. I was part of the whorebag click. Wait.... I guess that would make me a manwhore???? Are there scarlet letters for men.
It's not really about that, but interesting story on your side. Yes, there are man w****s, but they .. read moreIt's not really about that, but interesting story on your side. Yes, there are man w****s, but they call them 'studs' instead. The write is more about guilt.
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Oh sorry. Hey Frieda don't you sleep?haha
11 Years Ago
Not much, no...that is foreign to my psyche apparently! ;-)
There is a difference. The scarlet letter could be seen by everyone and your letter is known only to you. None of us see anything that identifies you as anything less than you really are and that's a real blessing.
I see the pain in this one. the anger too...scars might remind us of our past but they don't have to define where we are going. God bless you Frieda.
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No they don't and I try to remedy that through purging this stuff here, you poor guys! Thanks for yo.. read moreNo they don't and I try to remedy that through purging this stuff here, you poor guys! Thanks for your support Night.
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...you're welcome...and I think you're a fine lady and a great writer...:)
I won't dare try decipher this, cos I'll get it wrong. (Remember?) :)
However, the atmosphere and language is dark and pithy, pure and flawed. Stimulating and intense, FP!
If you like, you can change 'left it's mark' to 'left its mark'. You'll be saving an apostrophe and doing your bit to cut down on carbon emissions!
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
haha you're a funny man C.R. I do that all the time, you'd think I'd learn...there is no wrong and/.. read morehaha you're a funny man C.R. I do that all the time, you'd think I'd learn...there is no wrong and/or right I feel in poetry, once I put it out there it's in your hands, see fit to do with it what you must. All reviews come from our own instigations of lfe. I thank you kindly sir. Caron emissions. ha. ;-)
I did attempt to remedy that by wearing something low cut whilst shoveling the drive, but all I got .. read moreI did attempt to remedy that by wearing something low cut whilst shoveling the drive, but all I got were 3 fender benders and frozen n*****s.
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LMAO, that's not what your poem is about I hope, scarlet n*****s would be painful. ;-)
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..