Fast Track

On the fast track of love to nowhere

my torn heart still weaves cobwebs

my eyes see only the soot and ashes

the past a blur of lies and deception

I was once light over moonbeams

now these shadows is where I dwell

your twisted game of hide and seek

the friend I thought was in my corner

turns out it was all a sickening farce

Knock on the door of crystal sanity

turns lucidity into regrets and lunacy

once wished upon a star 'for eternity'

forever after just a heart's foolish hope

Transparencies of a life's film track

rewind torments each waking moment

replaying over the sins and transgressions

instant replay of a true love demolished

The scars remain like a branded stain

trust run over like a runaway train

is there a fate worse than betrayal?

closure would be of your casket

                                               

 

Reviews

[David Scott]

Strong write Frieda.
Last stanza is most telling and maybe even incriminating.
All one can do is rise above, step over, go around, let it pass, etc...
Give up a little and gain so much more. Why cry that you lost your poisoned fruit. Look for a meal that will nourish you now and let the "dead" bury the "dead".
Loved the write and I need to self talk as well. Ha

[Frieda P]

I didn't kill him, I promise. Not yet, anyway. ;-)

[rnuff]

very powerful, love the fourth stanza, awesome write,
i can feel the emotions.

[Frieda P]

Thanks, I still feel it too.

[Ahmad Cox]

This was very powerful message and a beautiful poem. I think we all have experienced being betrayed at some point in our lives.

[Frieda P]

I figured a lot of people could relate, which is tragic in and of itself. Thanks Ahmad.

[That_Girl]

You don't need an apostrophe in "moonbeams" silly goose. ;p No ownership there.

Sounds like one helluva train to me! You and LA are sure to have a trip! :)

[Frieda P]

For some reason I have an abundance of apostrophes I keep wanting to unload, cheap, ya want some? Thanks Avy. ;-)
You want to come along, sounds like a fun trip with LA?

[That_Girl]

Drunk, biter, and vindictive sounds about perfect.

Oops, I mean, bitter. ;) haha

And no! I am not cheap nor do I want cheap things. ;p lmao

[Frieda P]

You've got something better to do than drunk, bitter and vindictive, live a little!! ;-P

[LA Lorena]

we must be riding in the same rail car. Let's call the porter over to get us some tequila. we can be drunk, bitter and vindictive together! then we'll go shoe shopping! Manolo ALWAYS delivers love and satisfaction. :)

[Frieda P]

haha best review ever!! Why didn't I think of that?! ;-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Says it all really I love the way you play with words I can feel every disappointment and anger in this, every hurt and pain. Another awesome write Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Carolann, it still smarts! ;-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes I can feel that.

[Frieda P]

I guess that's good then. :-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes :)

[Night]

...Oh my, you do have a way with words my friend...been there, done that...solid write Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I guess we all have at one time or another eh? Thanks for the kind words.