Angel of One Wing

A very dear friend of mine sent me that wonderful picture, which inspired this. As survivors, we've always called ourselves one winged angels. Enjoy.

Angel

 with the fractured wing 

whispers

 on a zephyr's snowflake

catches

 the tears of sullen eyes

blowing kisses

 per messages of love

         bubble wraps 

your heart for safe keeping 

floats

    on a periwinkle cotton candy pillow

no broken element

 can deny your potent power

                 like a candle flickering

 in a strong gust of wind &

crashing roar of waves at high tides fury

the cries of great warrior's 

           forging survival in battle

no wreckage

 will snuff your courage nor strength

soaring ever so softly

 to save the lives of myriad crush

carrying the other one winged angels

 with felicitous fortitude's 

conviction

 onto billows of silk

 for a safe place to gently fall

                                                                        

                                                                                       

                        

                                                             

 

Reviews

[Dinesh Sairam]

I found the assonance (sullen eyes, roar of waves) and alliteration (cotton candy, potent power) to be distracting. I'm not sure if you planned those things, but I prefer seeing them in a romantic or humorous poem. Maybe it's just me.

Because, this is much more than just sparks and fire. This is strong and straight-forward. "no wreckage will snuff your courage" is, for me, the lines that best animates the poem.

And I got here from the "heart over mind" contest, which asked to review a poem that's already entered in the contest. I thought it was a great, nimble idea. Hope you reviewed someone's poem too.

Good day. Keep writing.

[Frieda P]

Thank you kindly for your review, as for the cotton candy, I wanted something light and ethereal...delicate like cotton candy.

Yes, I have reviewed as a matter of fact.

Appreciate your critique, pen on....

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow very powerful and very beautiful. Thanks so much for sharing.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Ahmad, this is a special one to me. Glad you like it.

[s y e]

Wow!!!!!!!
Amazing my dear

[rnuff]

love the set up, this is a wonderful beuatiful write.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Beautiful, I love that together we can fly.

[David Scott]

A single tear...

[Lover Of Words]

this is one amazing peice wonderful job