Angel of One Wing

A very dear friend of mine sent me that wonderful picture, which inspired this. As survivors, we've always called ourselves one winged angels. Enjoy.

Angel

 with the fractured wing 

whispers

 on a zephyr's snowflake

catches

 the tears of sullen eyes

blowing kisses

 per messages of love

         bubble wraps 

your heart for safe keeping 

floats

    on a periwinkle cotton candy pillow

no broken element

 can deny your potent power

                 like a candle flickering

 in a strong gust of wind &

crashing roar of waves at high tides fury

the cries of great warrior's 

           forging survival in battle

no wreckage

 will snuff your courage nor strength

soaring ever so softly

 to save the lives of myriad crush

carrying the other one winged angels

 with felicitous fortitude's 

conviction

 onto billows of silk

 for a safe place to gently fall

                                                                        

                                                                                       

                        

                                                             

 

Reviews

[Dinesh Sairam]

I found the assonance (sullen eyes, roar of waves) and alliteration (cotton candy, potent power) to be distracting. I'm not sure if you planned those things, but I prefer seeing them in a romantic or humorous poem. Maybe it's just me.

Because, this is much more than just sparks and fire. This is strong and straight-forward. "no wreckage will snuff your courage" is, for me, the lines that best animates the poem.

And I got here from the "heart over mind" contest, which asked to review a poem that's already entered in the contest. I thought it was a great, nimble idea. Hope you reviewed someone's poem too.

Good day. Keep writing.

[Frieda P]

Thank you kindly for your review, as for the cotton candy, I wanted something light and ethereal...delicate like cotton candy.

Yes, I have reviewed as a matter of fact.

Appreciate your critique, pen on....

[KeeD]

Frieda I love the words you choose to use in your pieces. It gives it so much more impact and excellence. "bubble wraps your heart for safe keeping " AWWWWWW!
"floats you on a periwinkle cotton candy pillow" Awww x2 you express love through your poems making the reader feel it like he's feeling the emotion for the first time. Truly awesome. I got the message to stay strong and keep moving on for I may be human, I may be flawed but I am not weak and so i'll never give up. I am an angel with one wing or a devil with one horn. Maybe i'm just a boy with a huge. Good job Frieda. xoxo Kee.

[AYVID N]

A beautiful message of love and being there for each other. Come what may. We can pick up our broken pieces and go on if we have each other. Thank you for sharing this.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A truly inspirational, hopeful and beautiful piece Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks John, means a lot coming from you. :-)

[Sheila Kline]

When one has only a single wing, the lack of the other wing gives cause for the angel with only one wing to be subjected to a period of testing which in the end causes a heightened sense of compassion, and ability to reach out to help those who are of like nature. When there is a coming together of such empathy the two become a powerful force of love which you speak of so eloquently. Their conviction indeed allows a safe place to gently fall onto billows of silk! They soar through the skies of pain and suffering to meet tranquility and victory!

Your write is beautiful and the image that inspired it delivers a message of hope!!

[kublakhan27]

Unreal...a work of beauty :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That is just so powerfully emotional... I am at a loss for words and a lump in my throat.

[Baby Ricochet]

The first two lines are gorgeous. Beautiful poem. Thank you for posting this

[C.C. Marx]

Oozing inspiration, it makes me want to soar. Brilliant write :)

[LA Lorena]

a most beautiful and inspiring write FP. I like this very much.

[Tasha]

This is a beautifully composed poem. It was truly inspiring.

Keep up the great work.
`Tasha

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Tasha, so are my friends.

[Tasha]

You're welcome. That's always a good thing.