the brink

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

an undefined moment

of hazed edged and razed expectation

balances dewlike upon the edges of change.

 

 

to leap where one has already lept

is quite easily completed,

thoughtlessly, many have done just that,

but, the action amounts to not much besides disappointment.

 

however, to dive from the edge of new opportunity

takes a deep breath and a solid spirit

and the promise of an adventure and a new beginning.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[SkinlessFrank]

This piece speaks to a universally important place we can recognize. It captures that hair-raising fear that we feel in our gut, and can keep us from taking the leap. I love the way this conjures up the physical and dizzying sensation of floating free of all that seems familiar and at the same time, deadening in our lives. A couple of things here. On punctuation (lol), I found the comma after the word “completed” to be distracting…but maybe that’s just me. The very last phrase in the second stanza, “the promise of an adventure and a new begging”, sounds a tad trite. Also, did you mean “beginning” not “begging”?

All in all, you do strong things with introspection. I wish I had had more friends who had your kind of sensitivity.

[Kara]

i love this poem. Its very motivational and as very well written. :) good write.

[Kenneth The Poet]

A solid, stoic piece of work.

[roarke]

and a new begging? or a new begging, or a new beginning?

interesting play between macro and micro focus. A different way of saying doing the same things over and over again and expecting something different to happen... but I like the way you say it better.

[Tim Lion]

yes. promises of adventure. OR, a kiss from a concrete slab of ouch! ;)

this is a cool philosophical bit. makes this reader question himself....amd I the follower or the trailblazer? the boring rerun, or the new boom?

hmm. I think most of us are both, but striving to be the pilgrim is important. I like the meaning. I think I'll keep it for later when I need it. thanks.
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[Mockingbird]

shows a message of courage to face the new and dispel from old ways. an intelligent and thought-provoking poem.