somniloquy

 

 

 

 

 

 

muttered breaths,

mumbling cries,

murmuring conversations,

spoken right next to your ear.

 

you awake drowsiliy,

half-heartedly,

but cannot block him out well enough

to stay asleep while he speaks nonsense,

though he does.

 

a stammer,

a sigh,

and a hint of a laugh,

his arms pulling you a bit closer,

without realizing it,

and you lean into his chest,

a small smile upon your face,

as this quirk of his

endears itself upon you.

 

and then he whispers something garbled,

followed by a smile,

and a wound to your heart,

as the name he says so lovingly

belongs to someone else.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

somniloquy: the act of talking in one's sleep. sleeptalking.

Reviews

[Brook]

Awww... this was so sad. I can't even imagine being in that position. I love that you were so creative with the word you chose to portray, creating a scene that most people wouldn't suspect upon hearing the word and its definition. I think this poem was your best so far in this collection, because it was so deep and meaningful. The word choice was great and there weren't any places where I stumbled; the words flowed easily and the image was easy to imagine.

100/100 for this one. :)

[Mockingbird]

i don't know which is worse: hearing someone else's name when the other is sleeptalking or during sex. interesting point of view.

[OT]

I do love that word, not so much for its meaning, but the phonetic appeal ha - somniloquy! I love how you've played on the word here, the revealing of the subconscious exposed by parasomnias - only for it not to be quite what she wanted to hear ha!! bittersweet poem, marvelling at the psyche and mind!

[Rosette Jewel]

Damn. The last line definitely got me. Loved it.

[Cocoacandy]

wow... i thought it was going to be a sweet poem, happily ever after type... but i guess i should know by now that that's not how you write lol.. good work, keep it up dear!
*cocoabean*

[The Cute 1]

this is nice