Come With Me

 

 

 

Come away with me and I'll show you happiness

Take my hand friend to a place where our soul can rest

Lay yourself and stay awhile

Feel it take you in and lift your sigh into a smile

 

Come with me to a place I call home

I promise that you will never feel alone

Let your dreams become real

And welcome in what you feel

 

Come with me and dance like a child

Let your body go wild

Make the song in your head take you away

For if you come with me forever your happiness will stay

 

Come with me and follow your feet

They will turn your pleasure on repeat

And as you tingle from your head to your toes

You'll understand this place no one knows

 

Come with me and play your game

Where you are different and never the same

And after then you'll see from the start

That this wonderful place you followed me to is your heart

Author's Note

:) Enjoy my friends

Reviews

[United Writings]

Erin,
I dont know what else to say but Wow... wonderful write i love it.
I wish i would have wrote it but then again then i would be able to read and review a piece like this and hopefully give a heart felt review. The funny thing is is that i have just watched a movie that i really like it was called What Dreams May Come with Robin Willams. If you have not seen it already I personally recommend you watch and enjoy anyways back on track , This poem leaves me in a stae of mind that i would never want to leave but then again have no reason that tells me i can stay. I totally understand and really like where your coming from. I felt that since no one else actually took the time to actually write a lengthy review I would. If I Could Rate It Which this poem is not supposed to be rated and You dont want it rated iwould still give it a 100 out of100

Thank You once again,

Promisekeeper

[Brette Medb]

For one thing this poem was pure and I liked that. The flow was great as well. Nice write.


Brette

[Antigone]

Love it! Good job, I liked your choice of words!

[a Messenger]

Another masterful write Erin.
I don't see how you do it. Two books in progress
and still have time to write such beautiful and
inspiring poetry.
I love the rhyme scheme and the rhythm and flow
were nearly perfect. The subject matter is, as
always with your work, inspiring.
You say in your header that you are in love with
inspiration. I say, don't ever break up!

[justink :):)]

i like it and i liked the way it flowed

justin:):)

[[untitled]]

Very nice!! I could hear music as I read this. I thought the first stanza really set the mood for the poem. It flowed well. Great work!!

[justjenn_2u]

Very thought provoking poem, my friend! So serene and smooth! I love your uplifting pieces.

Thanks for sharing!