Dear God, Save Me

A man on death road pleads to God.

Dear God,

I've been in my cell for over three years

I've grew some comfort with the sound of my tears

The door is locked and the lights are out

No one can hear my screams or shouts

I can't feel the cold anymore on my skin

They all say I'm guilty for all my sins

I didn’t do it, this thing they say

If I don't get out of here, then I'll die today!

They gave me a choice of how I can die

Electrocution until my body grows dry

Injections that fled into my veins

I'll lay there and slowly my soul will drain

I told them so many times that I am not the one to blame

But all they tell me is always the same

I did not kill that girl I swear

I was at home, I was not there

My heart is calm yet my head is at war

What did You put me on earth for?

I'm barely an adult and never had a wife

I barely turned nineteen and this is my life?

Will hell take me into it's fires?

Or will You know I'm innocent and bring me into sweet desire?

I need to know this before I die

I need no misjudgment, I need no lies

I hear them coming to my cell

I need to know!

Am I going to hell?

God be my redeemer and take me now

I'm sitting on my knees, to You I bow

My soul is pure and I never held that gun

Dear God as my savior take me I am your son

 

Author's Note

:)Let my writing float you away... lol

Reviews

[United Writings]

Erin
i'm lost in words, do not know what to say but congrads on this write, it has sent me place where i did not think i could go. into the jail with this untainted man who prays god will not send him to hell.
he is the innocent and the unsullied shall live on
in the after life

Great Write
Promisekeeper

[Ivan Mauricio Urrego]

ahh this was a very enjoyable read! very deep of the last moments of his life! this is a moment of despair, very good!

[Tyler James]

I don't know where your inspiration came from for this, but this was good, really good. Very thought provoking on a subject i'd never thought before, you captured the quintessential essence of this piece, with simple words but a complex meaning. what really would go through your mind on death row! great write!

[stipe]

First time I see you play around with text in this way. very very interesting. here and there grammar not right, but i suspect it's intentional? innovative piece. good work

[justjenn_2u]

Very intriguing subject. God always knows the truth. We may spend our entire lives paying for something we did not do, but in the end, (in the Book of Life) - all will be set straight. I could feel the urgency of his voice in this poem. Very heartbreaking but a bittersweet ending because God is fair and just. Nice write, my friend.

[justink :):)]

wow..... is an understatment yorealy have me floated away lol great write love it


love justin

[Travis Lawrence]

This is my favorite poem of yours, I'd have to say, because of your experimentation with the visual form. Really enjoyed it, and it's an interesting topic, to think about what it would be like to be this man. It's so sad...

-Travis

[J.P.O.et]

This is very powefull with the form you used and I love the
cross outs and whatnot, very interesting techniques.
One question, 'Or will you know I'm incident', tripped me up
Maybe indecent but I'm not sure. Like the way you think
outside of the box and get creative on this one. Well done

J.P.O.et

[Imagedden]

Hi Erin,
Pretty scary concept. I wonder how many innocent people are actually executed ? Knowing that you are going to die with certainty from non-natural causes would surely be a potion to appreciate each and every day. That's what I came away with and it definitely was a very moving poem.

Do you still want me to go in your competition ?

Imagedden

[Fran Marie]

A well crafted piece deeply expressed and well penned~THanks for sharing~Fran Marie

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Damn! this is so good :D

Well, I haven't read many of your writes(but looking forward to read), but according to me this is your best one till date!
Very emotional and heart touching!
I found a sense of frustration in it and if a person is angry from himself only for his condition.
This is really a brilliant piece! :)