Changing My Ways For Good

A boy changes his ways.

You say you want to live your life, and never turn back.
And no one can change your mind because it's already made up.
You say you heard your calling, and it's time to answer it.
That it's time to be happy in this world of war because times running out, and there might not be another chance again.
You say that it feels good to know you're doing all right, and it's been a long time since you felt that.
Like everything you worked for before was a waste of time, and all you want to do is move on.
You say you would want to thank her for your given strength.
Because of her you're a better man.
Because of her you understand.
You say that you should have told her that before she left, but something inside her blue beautiful eyes told you she knew.
So go get your bags boy, and tell your mother that everythings going to be fine.
You're doing something good for once, and no one can tell you any different.
Off to war to serve your country.
Off to war to serve yourself.
You might make a difference when you step foot on that bus.
You might make a difference to us.

Author's Note

This is a happy poem ... right?

Reviews

[[untitled]]

I liked this! It was happy and a little sad. Happy in a way that this person has decided to do something good with their life, sad because of going off to war. I liked the way you expressed yourself. I liked the structure. I feel that the longer lines at the start make it look like this person is having a lot of doubt but at the end his mind is made up thats why they are shorter. Great poem!

[Antigone]

I think it's kind of sad, because he knows what he's leaving behind, but he's going on anyway to "serve his country," but most people don't realize how awful war is until they're the ones watching everyone die. Good job, Erin.

[Joseph - Michael]

Happy poem? It's more like a inspiration poem in a lot of ways. Happy or sad? There's no telling, because you haven't said what happened to that person, except just that person gave out some of the inspirations, that's all

Other than that, it's still all good...

[stipe]

No. I think that if you had to check out how war affects those involved in it, it couldn't possibly be a happy poem. perhaps heroic... but perhaps the "boy" is acting out of a misguided sense of patriotism. Not bad though Erin, give it some thought and perhaps a touch more work, it's like you've got a conviction somewhere in there, but I can't quite spot it...

[smiggle wiggle]

I can't really decide if this is happy or sad, it could be both I guess... I mean it's happy because the boy is finally doing something right and it's sad because he's putting his life in danger and he could die in war.

[justjenn_2u]

This poem could be a song. The entire time I read this, I was thinking "song, song, song". You should expand this and make a complete song. : )

[Travis Lawrence]

To be honest, I can't tell whether this is happy or sad. The context isn't exactly clear to me. BUT, I'm not so sure that matters. I feel I can already relate to this, especially this lines:

"That it's time to be happy in this world of war because times running out, and there might not be another chance again.
You say that it feels good to know you're doing all right, and it's been a long time since you felt that.
Like everything you worked for before was a waste of time, and all you want to do is move on."

The last phrase there strikes me, too, because these days that's all I want to do.

-Travis

[Sean M. Addams]

very interesting poem ... great imagery and flow to this one.... very enjoyable read .... fav line.So go get your bags boy, and tell your mother that everythings going to be fine.
You're doing something good for once, and no one can tell you any different.
Off to war to serve your country.
Off to war to serve yourself.
You might make a difference when you step foot on that bus.
You might make a difference to us.
.............................................................................. great job on this one

[Daly]

I really love this poem, but I feel that your lines are uneven. At the beginning they're long, then towards the end they grew short. If you made each of the lines long or short, most likely it'll seem more of a poem than an uneven paragraph. Not to offend you, but I just want to let you know about that as a suggestion.

[Prose-full]

"So go get your bags boy, and tell your mother that everythings going to be fine.
You're doing something good .."-----i like the way you through that humor in --"So go get your bags boy,.." commanding, but if ya woulda told me like that i'd be running to get my bags too..*smile*

great write...took me back a little bit to my military days..and actually "stepping my foot on that bus."
more, more..thanks for requesting my eyes......