You convey the strain of the situation well with this poem; I'm no stranger to the feeling of being in a room full of people who are too hesitant to speak to one another and yet are uncomfortable maintaining the silence. I've always said that awkwardness is collective; if one person breaks the chain, the rest will follow. If one person breaches the dam, the river will flow.
Line two, however, has a misspelling. "Here" should be spelled "hear," but other than that one typo, I see no errors.
The metaphor in line five is particularly apt, a safe choice to use as a parallel for the situation. This is a short poem, but as I said earlier, it succeeds in conveying the appropriate emotions.
I like it. The short style, economy of words, gets your point across and is fitting for the subject matter. We get so worked up over what we fear, rather than the situation itself. You illustrate that well here.
I'm currently a junior in high school, I'm hoping on heading off to college this September for Graphic design. Writing poetry is what has kept me alive and fighting for so long, If you treat me with r.. more..