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Unspoken Element

Unspoken Element

A Poem by jfk
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You startled me

When you spoke them aloud

They are the thoughts that swirl around silently

Filling the space between our words.

 

The water slipping through our gills

The air our wings frantically push against as we take flight

The dark damp soil out roots twist through seeking nourishment

The vast vacuum of space  providing distance between our two heavenly bodies.

 

The fish, birds, trees, and stars

Inherently know they could not exist

Without this unspoken element.

I would have been just as stunned to hear it from them.

 

© 2008 jfk


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The second stanza puts out a lot of the body of this verse... I wonder if you wanted to convey this more in the lines to the reader:

You startled me
When you spoke them aloud
They are the thoughts that swirl around silently
Filling the space between our words.

The water slipping through our gills
The air our wings frantically push against as we take flight
The dark damp soil out roots twist through seeking nourishment
The vast vacuum of space providing distance between our two heavenly bodies.

The fish, birds, trees, and stars
Inherently know they could not exist
Without this unspoken element.
I would have been just as stunned to hear it from them.
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You startled me
When you spoke them aloud
They are the thoughts that swirl around silently
Fill the space between our words.

Water slipping through our gills
Air our wings frantically push against as we take flight
Dark damp soil out roots twist through seeking nourishment
Vast vacuum of space provide distance between our two heavenly bodies.

Fish, birds, trees, and stars
Inherently know they could not exist
Without is an unspoken element.
I would have been just as stunned to hear it from them.




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