never

The light did not shine today,

it did not break that ugly shade of gray.

the dark past consuming hope leaving behind regrets.

Giving all and nothing asked in return

every last heart beat

every last breath

every last thought

yet

it was never enough.

never good enough

never the best

Reviews

Something is disturbed here, but I don't know what it is. It's base context is a personal feeling, but there is no image attached to the feeling that you are trying to deliver. I think we need details about the 'it' of the poem, which I'm assuming might actually be a person, but even then I'm just left to assume what is going on. It feels like this is a topic that you do not know how to breach or that you are not ready to. You should never hold anything back in a poem for the readers sake or for the sake of being elusive.

[Bridgette's Ink]

This is sad, seems like there is no hope :( but it was a good read.

Please, feel free to read my stuff :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

good progression of thought and image I liked how you wove this poem together

[Nobody.]

oof. strong piece. really kicked me in the mouth. I like it.
cheers!
R.G.

[stellasautelle]

nice piece :) keep up the good work

[An Ordinary Woman]

very good, well written, but a sad piece. mixed in it's smooth flow however, is a tinge of hope. Maybe tomorrow the sun will shine. There is always that for us writers.

Excellent.

I read your statement on your profile and said to myself "this person is gonna be good." You are. :)