The darkest moment

that's how the darkest moment feels like...

a tall wall blocks my view

a sad smile lies on my face

hard cruel words rip my skin

you are already gone

 

since that day

there is no sunshine

there is no love

there is no faith

 

long before you came

i had hopes

i had dreams

i was brave

 

now what's left

is only pain

is only rage

is only darkness

 

you took my heart with you...

will you keep it safe?

Author's Note

Nothing really to say...

Reviews

[B-poet]

This is a thought provoking poem. It's also asking if the coveter will have good intentions with coveting what he desired the most. A need to control a heartfelt emotional connection with an attractive person. Great write. :)

[F.P. Chat]

thank you very much...:)

[Sami Khalil]

I like this poem...

[F.P. Chat]

well thank you very much! not much of a poet so reaally appreciate it.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...

[Kaylor Mason]

Sounds like a genuine no-good b*****d . . . might sound harsh, but don't feel bad; you're better off without him

[F.P. Chat]

well it's not referring to me, but my book hero Tita, but thanks

[Pax]

a very painful moment in life. keep strong.

[demureminds]

Last line was a wow moment. Loved the piece and great depiction of losing somebody you love, it really brought out the heartache and vulnerability.

[F.P. Chat]

thanks for reading. i am glad you liked it :)

[ba_mcfarlane]

The almost exquisite pain of losing a lover is well captured here. It brought to mind hurting so much, each breath burning, agony. I love this. No, love is exactly the worst word for me to use. This piece took me back to where I don't want to be. Again. A better word is powerful.

[F.P. Chat]

many thanks for reading. as always i like your review!
that was the point...to bring this feeling to whomever reading.
thanks again

[Muse]

Will you keep it safe? The million dollar question for many is it not? We give so much of ourselves...and at times....we never get it back. I like this fantasy mixed in with emotions of human reality. Nice work!

Muse.

[F.P. Chat]

thanks
many thanks for reading, happy you liked it

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I guess emotion comes from experience. I liked this because it flows well is honest and has raw emtion.

[F.P. Chat]

thanks for reading, glad you liked it.
i guess we all have lived a love that finished ugly...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well I have done it a fair few times and survived so you can too if you own your own destiny.

[F.P. Chat]

:)

[Antonio Valentino]

ooooh that last line was really good..

we ask that question of those who take from us.. when in reality it is us who will determne if it, becomes, safe again..

very poignant piece my friend.. i read below this is from a character in one of your books/stories.. if the fiction was, taken, from life's facts, i hope the optimism of your spirit melts down that wall so the sun may find you smiling once again..

lovely
:)

[F.P. Chat]

well if you exclude the fact that she is a fairy and her dead boyfriend is a vampire and her new friend is a male fairy and... nope, no reality at all! ;)
thanks for your nice words and for reading me.

[Antonio Valentino]

good to hear..

the sun would have missed you..

:)

[axel]

well fp chat, your poem is really something,but i think you should add a few words of encouragement to it, things have changed, people move on,there is always a light , just look ahead

[F.P. Chat]

Actually this refers to my main character's feelings, not mine
but she moves on

[axel]

yeah,i had weird though, you see i like to live what i am reading,i want us to write something together that is if you are willing

[F.P. Chat]

hi,
I am usually quite open to any suggestions when it cames to writing but the timing is not very good now. maybe as of Sep