You.

I notice many things

How the clouds go on their travels
How water droplets fall systematically down the side
How even the smallest gesture from a person can make someone's day

What I notice most however,
Is you.

The way your shoulders indent and arms hang loose when walking
The way you tilt like a Jenga puzzle trying to keep its balance when writing a paper

Your beauty is Indescribable. Unthinkable. Impossible.

But it is there for everyone to see
So all I ask for, is for you,
to notice me

Reviews

[Inspiring Writer]

Totally Incredible piece of writing came from your heart, from your Mind. Nicely penned, words're deep and floating over the poem. Starting as well as ending both're awesome and nicely penned. Your Imaginary seemed perfect here in this piece.
Keep writing.

[Mrs H]

I love this, Daniel. I'm impressed. One crit from your English teacher: lose the apostrophe on its!!! Otherwise, love the shape, the notice you...notice me, the Jenga simile and the gesture observation. "Narce."

[Sourav]

NIce...well written. Liked your style of writing.

[Miranda Richard]

Very beautiful piece. I normally use rhyme so it was a little more hard to understand..but it seemed as if by not rhyming it was MORE powerful. Keep writing my friend :)

[ayele marie dalmeida]

this is incredible,the way you like someone so much you notice every little thing they do and you became fascinated with small details of them,but they never notice you
I enjoyed it,thanks for sharing :-)

[Sami Khalil]

Touching and lovely which is noticeable...Bravo.....................

[SyberRose]

Enjoyed this piece...very beautiful Daniel...and touching...(you might want to edit shoulders)...Rose:)

[zainul]

Wonderful write

[Bethany]

This is absolutely beautiful.
Wonderful wording, clever structure and great concept.
I especially love the ending, I think a good ending is key for a great poem and yours really brings the whole thing together.
I don't know if you planned this out beforehand, or just wrote it as it came to you, but the structure is just perfect.
Great job :)