Institution

Institutions embrace confusion

Dismembered thoughts are everywhere

Some souls have deep abrasions

Some too numb to feel the fear

I have too much time on my hands

To digest the situation

Staring at these four white walls 

Only adds to my frustration

Some are sitting in the corner

With empty transfixed stares

Some are rocking back and forth 

Pulling out their hair

This institutions overcrowded

Close my eyes and wish it's not

Hope people will remember you

Won't leave you there to rot

Most of them are in a vegetative state

Parked at different places

Some are here forever 

Traveling endless amounts of paces

And these meds that I take

Cause cremation of the mind

But I must take them as scheduled 

Everyday at the same time 

Reviews

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Amazing poem. Very good imagery, and description. Nicely penned.

[audrie]

Thanks.so.much.for.reviewing.my.writing.and.the.kind.compliment!

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome.

[Maskedthoughts]

I loved how each stanza brought something to the table and took the poem a step deeper. Great write!

[audrie]

Thanks for taking the time to read this and the kind compliment!

[Gaia Octavia]

I particularly liked "dismembered thoughts" and "cremation of the mind" good imagery!

[audrie]

Thanks for the kind review!

[B-poet]

Loved the last stanza as it relates to meds causing cremation of the of mind. It's a stunning visualization of what really happens behind the closed doors of most mental institutions. Great work audrie, a gripping & profound read. :)

[audrie]

Thanks for the thoughtful review - it's sad to say that I have been exposed to this situation and hate the idea of taking medication because it does have an effect on your cerebral cortex which effects your higher functioning. I have often contemplated not taking medication for this very reason. Thanks for the review!

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the logic of this poem. When we are in the vegetative state. Weak people fall to greedy rules and laws.
"Most of them are in a vegetative state
Parked at different places
Some are here forever
Traveling endless amounts of paces"
The above line is happening today. A generation of people afraid to stand up is a scary future. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[audrie]

Thank you Coyote for your kind review - it's nice to see that others understand these happenings. I have seen first hand how institutions would rather over medicate than actually delving deeper into the psychological issues of the deep rooted problems of their patients. Thanks for the review!

[Donald]

This poem strikes too close to home, I am impressed by it.

[audrie]

Thanks for the review - I'm sad and glad that you can relate.

[Ruth]

Saddening, very much so - are meds the answer? I am torn on that question...this is beautifully woven and left a sting in my heart, no-one should be seen as a statistic and not a person...moving poetry x

[audrie]

Thanks Poppy - I completely agree with you - there aren't enough resources to help people who need this kind of help and it's just easier to medicate and stash in an institution. Thanks for the review.

[Avinash]

Being inside vicious cycle could be pretty suffocating and this shows strong emotions of those times but in a very rhythmic way.

[audrie]

Tanks Avinash - this was an easy poem for me to write - luckily I was able to escape this situation before my mind turned to mush!

[anne]

I would say a very powerful write....."Some are sitting.........pulling out the hair"......so heart felt........it feels we could do something ,its so difficult to accept but it is........

[audrie]

Thanks Anne - it was amazing the things that I saw when I had to go to the hospital = people just being stored because nthe system doesnt care enough to truly help.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a little "cuckoos nest" meets "girl interrupted"

we fight the demons...we refuse to be one of the vacant stares...there is still life and sanity left in us...won't somebody see that?

don't discard me.

[audrie]

Thanks Jacob - another thoughtful review - always appreciated!