Final Straw

the jitters were the final straw

the pacing was the final straw

the egotistical visions 

final straw

the cockroaches

final straw

the s**t on the was 

final straw

the oatmeal on the kitchen floor to feed the bugs

final straw

the invented laser especially made for the government

final straw

the chewing tobacco

final straw

the gold chains around your nekck

final straw

working for the CIA 

final straw

shoving food into your mouth

final straw
it's all about you 

and the tings you do

that was the final straw

Author's Note

This all happened one night when I went on a date with a schizophrenic guy who wasn't taking his medication. . . it was so very interesting!

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

Oh wow, not funny, I know but jeez, must have been interesting.
Good write. Pretty intense.

[audrie]

Craziest date EVER - but I'm glad I had the experience - thanks for the comment

[Pax]

intriguing piece, the repetition made it more mysterious and the life it shows brings many abstract imagery. very nice my friend...

[audrie]

Why thank you my friend

[Pax]

welcome :)

[Inda]

Interesting indeed!! A fun read that's a bit out there, fantastic!

[audrie]

yes - the date was a bit out there also!

[nseddy]

This is crazy funny wow, nice poem. I bet it was an interesting date!

[audrie]

ha ha! Funny now but really creepy the night I went out with him - I had absolutely no idea how crazy he could get.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is humor and heaviness mixed so nicely together in this love/hate poem...

[audrie]

I made it through that night alive - he really had me nervous - Thanks for the review

[Saddam]

Funny.... Great read dear.... You are just fantastic.

[audrie]

Ahh - thanks! and thanks for reading it , I'm glad you liked it. It is one of my favorite poems

[Cory Barrett]

This sounds like a wild ride. I would have loved to have been a fly on the wall for that date!

[audrie]

yes, indeed - this was one of the most interesting nights that I have ever had!