Adolescent Identity

My name is made
out of denial,cigarettes and marked cards
I've always been poisoned by small city hearts
haunting small minded boys with small cars
discussing their future underneath the stars
acting like adults
and criticizing everybody acting likewise

Reviews

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This is the perfect description of an adolescent. Adolescents tend to think they are always correct. They always oppose others and condemn what they say. They are neither children, nor adults, but sometimes they act too childishly and sometimes too maturely. Well-written. Keep writing.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Exactly!
Thank you for your review!
I will!

[Bacchus]

fun-
because we've all been those kids pretending to be adults
so wise...
with the small minds,
and criticizing

good one here... wished it was even longer

[forgotten_ghosts]

Actually, I wrote other parts but there in German so..
Thank you for your review!

[Woody]

you've described the adolescent's actions and mind set pretty well in this short poem FG.
you've summed it all very well. not much else to add. kudos to you.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Thank you for your review,Woody. Yeah, puberty was strange and the people I used to hang out with were much stranger..or much more stupid..
I don't know what kudos means but thank you and also kudos to you,Woody. :D

[Woody]

haha with Google, you're never lot. but to save you the trouble. that means bravo :)

[Woody]

never lost

[forgotten_ghosts]

Thank you very much,Woodie.:)