When rain turned into snow

I can't come up with titles for my poems..

You may think you deserve more
than the stars in the sky
all the birds must know
it even when they are flying so high
but nobody has given you anything
when rain turned into snow

3.September.2014-T

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think and thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Woody]

Hi f.g.
I must confess that I'm not very good at deciphering poems. so maybe I'm missing something here.
I like the first 2 lines and the last 2 lines a lot. it's the middle ones that threw me. my problem is with the verb "know". does it not need an object? but then what do I know about poetry, right? :)

[forgotten_ghosts]

Yeah, you're right. I didn't see that mistake before,thank you! Now I have to come up with a solution, so I don't destroy the poem by writing something stupid instead of this part.. I think I should stick with writing in German instead of English. Oo

[Woody]

please don't rush and change anything on my account before you get other opinions. let's wait and see if other reviewers think differently.

[Bacchus]

winter is the hardest to get isn't it?
to me it is the season that reveals all those hidden birds' nests...
to show what they are really like.
thought provoking.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Yes, it is.
Thank you for stoping by!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we make people very cold toward us when we are really that self-centered...and we can turn a rain of fortune, a rain of friends easily into a cold snow of loneliness.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Well spoken. I'm sorry I answered so late. I must have overlooked your review.
Thank you for reading!

[Norman 223]

Take a look at the beautiful shapes of snowflakes. They are also within reach

[forgotten_ghosts]

Oh, yes.
P.s Today I saw many snowflakes. In April, In Germany. The weather here is killing me

[Inject Positivity]

Okay the poem starts and ends beautifully, there is a deep thought in the poem with a touch of human life and nature but the middle part seems a little out of touch, there is a question that comes out in my mind after reading the 3rd line and that is 'what all the birds must know? "... If you give it a read I'm sure you will come up with something better and great.... But I have enjoyed it's overall meaning...

Sincerely,
Dhiman

[forgotten_ghosts]

Thank you very much for your kind words, Dhiman! I'm trying to figure something out!

[Inject Positivity]

You are welcome dear frnd... I know you will come up with something... By the way in my opinion you can you use the last line as the title of the poem, it really looks great....

[forgotten_ghosts]

Man, that's a great idea! I'm going to change the title immediatly! Thank you so much friend!

[Inject Positivity]

You are welcome, we are here to help each other my frnd... Anytime...