now i listen song about black angel and start read your poem. it s nice imagination very good leading over your words. special ending your smile at last . p. s
don t be afraid fail when you fail you will be again smile your angel never leave you
Very nice attempt at the form! I think the idea is good, and I know that forms can feel a little restrictive, but I think that maybe you did not express as strongly as you wished the emotions of the speaker. Remember that, in poetry, every single word has to convey power, so choose them wisely!
Loved it - uplifting and inspiring. Shelved it in my library for future times of need. Thank you so much for this poem. Loved the repetition on the last lines
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Thank you so much. You made me smile, stargazer. BTW, why are you called as such?
Your poem is so lovely - full of love and light. You did a great job with the form. My only suggestion is to check the rhyme on the last verse - it's a bit of a stretch - but the rest of the poem is perfect!
Ah, okay. I think its hard to make that one, unless I change the 1st two lines...or I'll change the .. read moreAh, okay. I think its hard to make that one, unless I change the 1st two lines...or I'll change the last two lines and the title (because the title came from the last line). Thanks a lot for checking it.
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It's a beautiful poem!
10 Years Ago
That poem of yours had brought me some learning today, plus enhancement of skill. Now, this form or .. read moreThat poem of yours had brought me some learning today, plus enhancement of skill. Now, this form or poetry is one of my favorites, too. Allow me to put the link as credit to your piece. Thanks again.