MY SMILE AT LAST

Those words from my most admired person... I will carry them in my heart wherever I am.

An angel fell from high above
As bright as sun and white as dove
His words are fine, the thoughts I have
Envoy of love, envoy of love.


He looked at me and said, "Let's fly.
I'll show you how, I'll show you why."
My fear was gone, I wasn't shy
No doubts of lie, no doubts of lie.


That angel took me from my place
And brought me to a higher space
The air I breathe, I was amazed
It kissed my face, it kissed my face.


And then he showed a looking glass
That thing he said, how good it was
I'd love to share the thought he has
As time will pass, as time will pass.


"And from this time you try  to smile
To face the world, walk every mile
Though your life seems a  shattered pile
Just smile awhile, just smile awhile.


To love oneself, it is a must
Just learn to build not hate but trust."
And so I tried, I've made it fast
My smile at last, my smile at last!










 

Author's Note

Inspired by Ms. Jewel's "Dancing In White" @ http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Julie-Ward/1299908/

My first attempt to Monotetra form. I wish I won't fail.

Reviews

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now i listen song about black angel and start read your poem. it s nice imagination very good leading over your words. special ending your smile at last . p. s

don t be afraid fail when you fail you will be again smile your angel never leave you

[LadyAnn68]

Always good to see a happy ending!

[DaughterNature]

Very nice attempt at the form! I think the idea is good, and I know that forms can feel a little restrictive, but I think that maybe you did not express as strongly as you wished the emotions of the speaker. Remember that, in poetry, every single word has to convey power, so choose them wisely!

[The Vintage Nail]

Enjoyed reading your poem, It is always a beautiful thing when we find joy instead of sorrow.

[one sky]

Thank you so much!

[Scott Metro]

You did fine...nicely done.
You found a good place to be...

Well done.
Scott

[one sky]

Thank you for the visit.

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scott.......

[Giggling Star]

Loved it - uplifting and inspiring. Shelved it in my library for future times of need. Thank you so much for this poem. Loved the repetition on the last lines

[one sky]

Thank you so much. You made me smile, stargazer. BTW, why are you called as such?

[Giggling Star]

Always trying to look up and always enthralled by the wonder of the heavens. :)

[one sky]

May the heavens shower you with what you look up in your life.
@ _ @

[Giggling Star]

Thank you for your kind thoughts :)

[Bluefire]

This is beautiful! I love the rhyme and flow, the unique end lines that repeat like a chorus.
Very well done!

[one sky]

Thanks, Bluefire.

[Bluefire]

No problem!

[An owl on the moon]

Your form and flow make such a perfect, wonderful music with the words. This gives wings to joy, and sends us all soaring... :)

[one sky]

Thanks for dropping by and for the kind words.

[Praveeta]

A lovely poem. Thanks for sharing.

[one sky]

Thanks for the visit, P.

[Praveeta]

You are welcome.

[MsJewel]

Your poem is so lovely - full of love and light. You did a great job with the form. My only suggestion is to check the rhyme on the last verse - it's a bit of a stretch - but the rest of the poem is perfect!

:) Julie

[one sky]

Ah, okay. I think its hard to make that one, unless I change the 1st two lines...or I'll change the last two lines and the title (because the title came from the last line). Thanks a lot for checking it.

[MsJewel]

It's a beautiful poem!

[one sky]

That poem of yours had brought me some learning today, plus enhancement of skill. Now, this form or poetry is one of my favorites, too. Allow me to put the link as credit to your piece. Thanks again.