This Friend

A twisted Irish Reel :p

I have this friend

who writes from her heart

but her heart has forgotten

she has One

 

Her mind instead

keeps scratching her head

and some of her best

are the worst fun

 

 

Her gut's in a rut

kicking her in her butt

and her metaphors cry out in anguish

 

How hard could it be

to feel out what she feels

when the skies have fallen

all around her

 

She should just let it go

answer the calling of doom

and watch her dreams for now

explode all over her room

 

Funny enough she'll find out

her right stuff

never left her

like she left she

 

When the Angels and Devils

and all the world's God

find her again

she'll have forgotten Me

 

And I her...

and All is well

in All universes

Infinitely <3

 

 

 

Robin

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Collette]

Beautiful...there is some serious hope in this piece. I think I needed to read it simply for that fact. This was an interesting stanza:

She should just let it go

answer the calling of doom

and watch her dreams for now

explode all over her room

for some reason, I felt as though I could see them dripping all over the curtains, running down the walls and into an invisible drain. Time to dust off the boots and get moving, eh? well done, friend.

[darkgurl]

Her gut's in a rut
kicking her in her butt
and her metaphors cry out in anguish

How hard could it be
to feel out what she feels
when the skies have fallen
all around her

I love these stanzas This is so well written, I can actually relate to this write, Awesome!!!......Kim

[Periac]

a bit witty and simple for your thoughts...enjoyed throughout..

your beat style is always fun to read, and this is no exception.

As always, your fundamentals are wonderful.

I like the message. it is interesting, and has aroused curiosity.

it is, at the same time, very graphic as it is amusing. This was an enjoyable read.

A great piece.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This reminds us of many of us who take up the quill and struggle to put our mind's eyes and hearts and souls to paper. Well expressed, vivid, shaking imagery. Nice work.
Light,
Siddartha

[Emily Elizabeth]

WWOOW I love this!
This is really good. Its unique, and interesting and I really wasn't expecting the ending!

'Watch her dreams for now
Explode all over her room'

One of the best lines I ever heard!

[Legion]

And so it goes....and goes....and goes....and goes. Searching the wilderness within is the hardest trek of all.

[Seriana]

Hum...I hear you Robin. :)
But I don't like, or agree with the ending two stanza's. I think your friend needs to figure out how to keep the best of everything, and everyone, including her, AND you. It's terrible to lose things.

[Broken.]

Wow this is amazing...





:') Truly.

[Angel's Lady]

Wow.
and watch her dreams for now
explode all over her room -- How perfectly you captured this...

Great write, Robin...indeed, terrifically written.