Thorny Rose

 

Thorny Rose

 

 

I want to be close to you

as close as noses

I’m not one to come on

heavy with the Roses

Just handfuls of petals of

an unrefined Love

Thorny Rose

 

I want to be close to you

as close as noses

sometimes I’ve been so far away

you’re the only one who knows this

I want to be your closest

 

I want to be close to you

as close as noses

your herkey-jerky punker slams

make me smile/laugh from head to toeses

with you I feel I am

 

I want to be close to you

as close as noses

Love is a subtle, sacred thing,

Lovee what I propose is…

you become the you

I will always Love.

 

Just be yourself my lover

from the moment I first felt us

You were/are my perfect Dove…

 

 

 

 

Robin

Reviews

[Seriana]

This is really a beautiful piece Robin. I love that Robin comes out every now and again aside from Panium and Foreshadow because it is such a genuine side that often doesn't show up with your other pieces. This was subtle, gentle and lovely. Sweet and eternal almost, and she must be a lucky girl. Good for you! Nicely written.

[Emily Rose]

Ah, I love the rhyme and how you play with it. "As close as noses" heh! A wonderfully original spin on an old and tired metaphor. And your definition of love is so perfect: "loves is a subtle, sacred thing" - ah Robin, I so agree!

[Angel's Lady]

Truly beautiful and very romantic. I do indeed love this piece. Wow. Nicely done!

[Damian Alan Gray]

WHAT?!? You gettin' sappy on me, boy?! LOL
This is great, Robin! I like the fact that you can offer this kind of thing to show your versatility. It's a mark of genius.

[ElJays Nicholas]

I like your proposal, "You become the you." Most people already have an image in their minds of who they want to be with, and it is unattainable. Here, you are saying just be you as you are. The most wonderful thing about romantic relationships is not the similarities the two share, but the beauty of the differences. You are saying the love is perfect, and not the superficial image of the relationship, where "flaws" and "imperfections" are also embraced and equally beautiful. "As close as noses"!! Brilliant line to reflect this sentiment. Usually, noses are the first part of the body viewed as being "imperfect." Another excellent poem from you, my friend. Much love....

[Sarah B.]

i love the line "as close as noses"...very cute poem

[Dani California]

I have to agree with Seri...
this truly shows a much softer side to you Robin.
And it's very nice.
Your gentleness exposed..
awww.

This is such a lovely piece...
Full of admiration and love, wow.

Just beautiful my friend!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Lovely ode, Robin. I like the use of repetition in this - it is quite effective as is the title. Well spoken and as Seriana said quite gentle. Delightful. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[darkgurl]

This is such a beautiful write here I can feel this. This is a very well written write.

[Emily B]

awww, so sweet. . .