I wanna say you something

I wanna say you something.

Are you going to listen me?

I wanna say you something.

From the day, when i saw you.

I loved you, without a reason.

Cos i have no expectations.

You are the only destination.

I wanna say you something

Are you going to listen me?

I wanna say you something

don't test me, till i cry.

My love for you is not a lie.

When i express it, you think I'm high.

And this makes me cry like anything.

But then i stop, just because of one thing..

Baby i wanna say you something.

Are you going to listen me?

I wanna say you something.

I can break into pieces,

to see your smile.

Impressing you being fake

is not my style.

I don't know,if you love me or not.

I trust you baby and you are my god.

And remember one thing,

I may die one day.

But my love is never ending.

I wanna say you something.

I wanna say you something. 

Author's Note

I am beginner and this is my first poem.
So kindly post your review about my writing skills, either if it is positive side or negative side.
Thank you all

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Thank you for inviting me to read your first poem, it's such an honour

Your words are truly wonderful, passionate and loving, they tell such a private story, calmly, almost perfectly but ..

maybe you could adjust the meter a little .. maybe read your words aloud, then lose some of them or shift them around .. find a rhythm if you can ..

i'm not an expert, but there are superb writers in the Cafe and the more you read, the more you'll understand, then improve whatever skills you think are necessary.

Whatever you do, keep writing, there 's amazing potential in your first poem .. truly.

[Surbhi Khandelwal]

From the day, when i saw you.
I loved you, without a reason.
Cos i have no expectations.
You are the only destination.
depicts a true love...i like your piece...keep writing...all the best ! :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow! I think you’ve done a great job in describing your fallings in this piece that’s one of the many things of what poetry is all about and that you’ve accomplish in this write. Keep on writing.

[darkgurl]

This is a very lovely write here. I like the title it's what drew me in.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. How many times in a life. Have we wanted to say something and were not allow to speak? I like the feel and desperation to be heard. A excellent poem. You made the point loud and clear. Thank you.
Coyote

[Liza]

beautiful delicate rose
that will love
understanding the thorns

[kk]

Thank you all for reviewing my first and giving me the boost to write another.....
@Emma: Next time i will surely, try to improve with rhymes.
Thanx a lot dear!!!!

[SiMbA tAgO]

its good man .. v.good for a start ... keep writing more.. u wil get better..

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a thoughtful and sincere beautiful poem filled with expressive movements that engage the reader completely~

[Ruth]

For your first poem love, this rocks!
Unique wording, love it!
Great flow, dark and emotional, great write xx

[Dream Weaver]

I think this was very strong for your first write.
"I wanna say you something," could maybe be
"I want to tell you something" But over all a
wonderful write indeed....