As the apple rots

a short song i wrote years ago probably in 2004

why leave so early, why go so late

its definate that with out his love all you do is hate

 

 

i found you out a time ago

 and now i know you need to go.

 

 

like a panda that looses his spots

or a rabbit that never learned to hop,

as the apple rots and is never good for eating

his and your heart  start beating.

 

 

just as the time starts to slow down and reverse

 and by the time i finish this verse

he and you will set a deep curse on me

Reviews

[ChaoticSoul]

I really like the photo you used to accompany this poem. The image you create in the text of the rotting apple really sets up the tone for this piece of writing. I really enjoyed reading it. If I were to offer a suggestion, I think if you were to end it with just "deep curse" and get rid of the "on me" it would make the ending more powerful, but that's just a personal opinion :) very nice writing.