Great Diversity

My first poem

Lost soul among the found,

Gazed upon by spirits; run

For you are different

Great diversity in your late discovery

And no authority shall stand it

 

 

Lost soul among the found,

Run, but not too quickly

Keep a quiet pace

Be stealthy in your escape

Great diversity in your choice to run

And no authority shall stand it

And no person ever countenance

Such a terroristic, lost soul

Great diversity in you

Author's Note

This is my first poem. Criticism is welcome, but please be kind.

Reviews

[Kiri Nells]

Hi, Collette! Welcome to the world of poets! Haha
Well this is an amazing first poem! You seem to be a natural, so there is only one thing I have to tell you, and it's not really criticism: keep using emotion. I can certainly tell that your Muse has been waiting a long time to crank out some poetry, so all you have to do is keep going and you'll be even more fantastic. Oh, and thank you for your lovely comment about me on your profile!

[Blissful Sin]

Very nice for a first poem! Keep up the great work!!

-Bliss

[leinahtan]

this makes me anxious, what a wonderful piece this is. i truly admire this. :)

[Kesha]

This is a very amazing piece being that it is your first! Short and wonderful!:) Good job!

[alegria]

its nice:) u cn go on n on...if this is ur first one:))