Afterlife of Sentences

a link to the cited poem... http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/i-like-my-body-when-it-is-with-your/

Last sentence.

so quite new*

not

quite so new

any more

how do

its hows*

my body*

your body*

muscles*

nerves*

no more

shocking fuzz*

between

what-is-it*

what-it-is

electric*

the

nerves*

are

parting*

singed by your

better*

* E.E. Cummings, “i like my body when it is with your”

Reviews

[Floundering About]

Last sentence.

so quite new*
not
quite so new
any more

how do
its hows*

my body*
your body*
muscles*
nerves*
no more

shocking fuzz*
between
what-is-it*
what-it-is
electric*
the
nerves*
are
parting*
singed by your
better*

[Awdures]

I enjoy reading form poems and poems based on other's works, I somehow found the added construction of the stanzas here confusing and un needed. The words speak for themselves, the poem is powerful enough without breaking its flow with shape formation.

Thank you for sharing!