Falling Apart

Thrown up and down, and then around,
A muddled mind- a piece of abstract art.
I wonder if you've ever had those moments,
When you found yourself falling apart.
That foul backbiting, the soul tired of fighting,
That deadly trap- a noose in a rope.
I wonder if you've ever had those moments,
When you lost every bit of your hope.
Betrayed, ignored, left tattered to be abhorred,
From top to toe- all covered in dust.
I wonder if you've ever had those moments,
When you were left with broken trust.

But this world is an illusion, full of confusion,
And often everything is not what it seems.
I wonder if you've ever fought back hard,
Adamant to continue following your dreams.
Many books on shelf, least knowledge of yourself,
Between the body and soul- an invisible door.
I wonder if you've ever looked deep within,
And made efforts to know yourself more.
Life is to be enjoyed, don't be paranoid,
A mistake- you think you're doomed forever.
You might feel that you are falling apart,
But what if you're only falling together?

Author's Note

~And if you ever chance upon this page, just know you are a soul very blessed. Don't give in, it'll be worth it in the end, you are just as strong as the rest~

Be strong and never lose hope.

Reviews

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Philosophy now, Madam? Evolving very well!

I am sure just about everyone can relate to this write, Zoe. We all have had moments where we have fallen in a heap with the weight of the world on our shoulders. Life can be a real meany sometimes! But as you have written here, it takes some serious introspection and willingness to rise up and overcome difficulties that shapes the person we will become. We truly learn who we are when we are faced with adversity.

I enjoyed this piece; very realistic and inspirational with some deft touches of internal and end rhyme. Certainly a piece for many to read and muse upon for their own growth and betterment.

Another strongly written piece, Zoe. Well Done.

[Zoya]

Haha, philosophy indeed. Very accurate words. Not everyone understands that, though.
Thank you very much, Doodley, for your ever so kind words. Means much :)

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Always welcome, you Cricket sledger!

[Zoya]

Heyyy! My surname isn't Warner!! XD

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That god! If it was, it means you can't bat!!

[Zoya]

Yass, I CAN bat! You should've seen me hitting those huge sixes yesterday when playing with my six-year-old brother ;-p

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Haha! Such a strong opponent!

[Zoya]

Indeed!
Has more knowledge about cricket than me already lol

[Chris]

Chuckling here... seems you have rediscovered how it is for most to really "become" adults in our current societies. So many try to fit in "their" way and find out just how much competition is real. Paying the price for success... takes more than mere effort and sometimes Luck (with a capital "L") trumps all else. You don't get trophies for "participating"... just the bills. BUT, you CAN be happy - if you find a way to deal, to accept, to live and to share your existence and awareness... and path...with someone that understands and both of you listen.

[Zoya]

You're right. There's competition for every freaking thing in the world. Only few know how to handle success properly, from amongst those who are lucky enough to be successful, and keep that ball rolling. I appreciate you reading and reviewing this one. Thank you :)

[Chris]

was a thought-full and perceptive piece.

[BlackPrince]

I LIKE THE WAY THE POEM FLOWS SMOOTHLY, PACKED WITH MEANING, GOOD RHYME SCHEME, A GOOD REFRAIN AND WONDERFUL WORD-CHOICE.

WELL DONE

[Zoya]

Thank you for the kind words. Much appreciated :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much Zoe. I am exactly feeling the way you have mentioned in the first stanza, you have hooked me by making me agree with your words and in the end you made me believe. I loved the transformation. Thank you so much.

[Zoya]

So glad I could help. Thank you so very much for reading :))

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Suhd]

Once again, a beautiful poem harboring really good messages. Motivational stuff :) Brilliant.

[Zoya]

Glag you liked it. Thank you very much :)