Falling Apart

Thrown up and down, and then around,
A muddled mind- a piece of abstract art.
I wonder if you've ever had those moments,
When you found yourself falling apart.
That foul backbiting, the soul tired of fighting,
That deadly trap- a noose in a rope.
I wonder if you've ever had those moments,
When you lost every bit of your hope.
Betrayed, ignored, left tattered to be abhorred,
From top to toe- all covered in dust.
I wonder if you've ever had those moments,
When you were left with broken trust.

But this world is an illusion, full of confusion,
And often everything is not what it seems.
I wonder if you've ever fought back hard,
Adamant to continue following your dreams.
Many books on shelf, least knowledge of yourself,
Between the body and soul- an invisible door.
I wonder if you've ever looked deep within,
And made efforts to know yourself more.
Life is to be enjoyed, don't be paranoid,
A mistake- you think you're doomed forever.
You might feel that you are falling apart,
But what if you're only falling together?

Author's Note

~And if you ever chance upon this page, just know you are a soul very blessed. Don't give in, it'll be worth it in the end, you are just as strong as the rest~

Be strong and never lose hope.

Reviews

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Philosophy now, Madam? Evolving very well!

I am sure just about everyone can relate to this write, Zoe. We all have had moments where we have fallen in a heap with the weight of the world on our shoulders. Life can be a real meany sometimes! But as you have written here, it takes some serious introspection and willingness to rise up and overcome difficulties that shapes the person we will become. We truly learn who we are when we are faced with adversity.

I enjoyed this piece; very realistic and inspirational with some deft touches of internal and end rhyme. Certainly a piece for many to read and muse upon for their own growth and betterment.

Another strongly written piece, Zoe. Well Done.

[Zoya]

Haha, philosophy indeed. Very accurate words. Not everyone understands that, though.
Thank you very much, Doodley, for your ever so kind words. Means much :)

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Always welcome, you Cricket sledger!

[Zoya]

Heyyy! My surname isn't Warner!! XD

[.]

That god! If it was, it means you can't bat!!

[Zoya]

Yass, I CAN bat! You should've seen me hitting those huge sixes yesterday when playing with my six-year-old brother ;-p

[.]

Haha! Such a strong opponent!

[Zoya]

Indeed!
Has more knowledge about cricket than me already lol

[duke]

manic...tragic.. magical...
but ultimately hopeful
as though you awoke from a bad dream

all the ingredients of a wonderful misfit poet

you're BRILLIANT!!

Duke

[Zoya]

Right back at you, my friend! Thanks for the read and kind review :)

[BlackPrince]

You're such a wonderful natural poet. Here, with such wonderful use of rhyme, good imagery and alluring, intoxicating repetition, you convey the idea that sometimes in life, the harsh situations we have been through, though painful and incomprehensible at first, can shape us to become experienced and stronger souls in life lessons.

YOU'RE A POETIC GENIUS. KEEP IT UP

[Zoya]

Thank you again for your extremely kind words! Appreciated :)

[I Am Svetlana]

I like to believe that when you fall apart, it is helping to prepare you for greater things. There are many days where I feel as if I've lost all hope in things, but I've taught myself to stay patient and anticipate what's to come after, what wonderful things will be. We can't rush things in our lives, but the world today has just been getting worse and worse, it definitely feels like a dream. And you're absolutely right: not everything is as it seems or else we'd have it all figured out already.

[Zoya]

Wonderful words, Svetlana! Thanks much :)

[KeeD]

This piece is like explaining me completely. I'm incomplete and falling and I connect with every word, falling is never easy but suffice to say it numbs my brittle soul knowing that I was never falling alone. Great write, thought-provoking!

[Zoya]

Thank you, kee! I appreciate your kind review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear Zoe.
"You might feel that you are falling apart,
But what if you're only falling together?"
Life will test us and we must go forward. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Zoya]

Thank you again, Coyote, for your time and review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this one Zoe and you are welcome.

[Elizabeth]

This is so powerful. A very profound read, which struck me right in the heart.
Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem

[Zoya]

Glad you liked it! Thank you :)

[Elizabeth]

You're welcome :)

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Ohh my my...
This is something happening Man.....
I loved the composition & the way you portrayed the thoughts.
Life seemed muddled up at times and lost & broken too
but a warrior is that who moves up & fights back hard...........

[Zoya]

Agreed. Thanks, Pragati. I appreciate it :)

[Pragati Chaudhary]

You are welcome!

[Wild Rose]

Yes been there and fallen off >>> A few times
Got up and carried on

Now no work; no bosses > Only her who MUST be obeyed
We get on fine >IF I do as i'm told
well that's OK She cooks for me
and sees to my basic needs
She don't complain just sees to things
I'm happy she does
We get on fine

[Zoya]

Good to hear!
Thank you for reviewing, Rose :)

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Life is to be enjoyed, don't be paranoid,
A mistake- you think you're doomed forever.
You might feel that you are falling apart,
But what if you're only falling together?

This part was incredible! it had me feeling like I could totally relate to it! You are an incredible author/writer!
Keep up the incredible work Zoe!

Your friend,

C. Lee Battaglia

[Zoya]

Glad you could relate! Thank you very much :)

[C. Lee Battaglia]

You are welcome!
Could you by chance check out my newest poem? I would love to hear your feedback!

[Zoya]

Oh, i just did :)

[andrew mitchell]

Yes what if you are falling apart to form a new together because we are forever changing in mind and body. A lovely write to ponder on. Good on you!.

[Zoya]

Thank you so much! Glad you liked it :)