People Are Only Seasons

In a world where change is the only constant, where in a flash trust turns into treason. It's all thanks to men, but it's okay then, 'cause darling, people are only seasons. Solemn as rain, furious as heat, or cold, very cold, as snow. Some leave a tan, or a frostbite, oh man! While some leave a beautiful rainbow. Ever-changing and shady in all their ways, such are the creatures gracing this land. From love to hate, oh that's heartbreak, that dilemma; can we ever understand? They come and go, making their presence felt, only few make their absence felt, too. They are the ones, who bring air to your lungs, and you never want to bid them adieu. Sundries of souls you'll meet so be careful, of who you allow in your region. Cause life is a beautiful mess, in which, I guess, people are only seasons...

Author's Note

Exams are round the corner and here I am writing a poem! Just had to get this out, hah.
(By 'men' I mean humans, not just the males).

Reviews

[Wonderland Asylum]

Interesting structure, but I like it.

I love your use of words to show the contrast and similarities between humanity and nature.

" Some leave a tan, or a frostbite, oh man! While some leave a beautiful rainbow."

This is absolutely my favorite lines in this poem. They are beautifully written, along with the rest of the piece.

The word choice is intriguing, and captivating.

This is one of my favorite poems that you have written.
As always, keep writing.

[Zoya]

Thank you much, Cat. I do appreciate :)

[Wonderland Asylum]

Your very welcome

[badmash]

The realism in this piece, gave me goosebumps. Fantastic job!

[Zoya]

Thanks much for the review! I appreciate it!

[Avia]

I feel like this sometimes, people can be frustrating to deal with, but I'm a person so someone probably thinks that about me too Lol. I guess we just have to take everyone as they come. Nice write up. All the best in your exams dear.

[Zoya]

You're right. We're no different from others. Thank you so much, Avia, for your time and review!

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Such bleeding heart leftists! Always keen to nitpick the work of others when their own work is rather ordinary! Forget the goons, Zoe. Anyone with half a brain could get the gist of what you were trying to illume.

Objectively, subjectively.......it doesnt really matter. What matters is that your words are infinitely relatable to all human beings.....what we call "mankind" before the political correct nutters started their lame chestbeating.

For people definitely are like the seasons; they come and go, drift into lives and out again. They are hot, cold, indifferent. And we adapt to them with the passing of time. Welcoming some, bidding others adieu.

I enjoyed this write, Zoe. Forget the knockers. This shows a level of maturity in one so young and inexperienced that even these so called gurus can't possibly understand.

Well Done! And good luck with your exams!

[Zoya]

I know, right! This isn't one of my best ones, I know that, too, but I was just trying to pen down what I felt! They sure can criticise but I thought that was a little too much for this one. It's all right, though. Just their opinions.
Thank you for the very kind review, and also for the wishes, Doodley! Means much.

[Suhd]

I like the way you translated this fine idea into verse. Bravo :)

[Zoya]

Thank you, Suhd. Means much :)

[wordman]

and it`s a good thing,they come and go taking their vile with them..

[Zoya]

Thanks for reading, wordman. I appreciate it!

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. Very fine poetry on human nature and life. That's true people just like seasons come and go. Loved the symbolism.

[Zoya]

Thank you, Najam. Your words are always appreciated :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. ☺

[BlackPrince]

In the last stanza, in the second line, there is a slight grammatical error:
'To grieve they'll you a million reasons.'
Did you mean: 'To grieve they'll give you a million reasons.'?

Grammatically, I believe, the first stanza should be:

'In a world where change is the only constant,
where in a flash trust turns into treason,
it's all thanks to men, but it's ok then,
cause, darling, people are only seasons.'

I wonder if, seeing the words above, you, due to a negative experience with a boy or any other men in your life, attribute treason only to men, when you say 'It's all thanks to men'.?

Although your argument here might seem bias and the subject matter, as a social factor of human interaction, not objectively approached, I would understand if you are writing solely from a personal point of view of experiences to make you attribute human changing nature only to men.

However if this is a general theme, then You'd have to reconsider your intended message and effect for the poem. For if change is a natural human phenomenon, then it should be looked at objectively.

But I strongly believe in everybody's freedom of expression, and therefore embrace the poem for what it is.

I do feel like more could come out of this poem. The ideas are good and well depicted. But I feel as though you rushed the poem.

[emipoemi]

I strongly second this review!

[Zoya]

By 'men' I mean humans, all humans. I understand what you're saying and you are right, I kind of rushed with the poem. Didn't really plan it out. Thank you for the extensive review. You both are appreciated!

[Zoya]

Made a lot of changes in the poem. Take a look, if you please, and do tell me how it reads.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha yes...we do come and go don't we ...along with all our works and buildings ... dust to dust ;) this is a great one to read to my kids ...when they were teens and so sure in love ...and heart broke ...last V L2 has difficult syntax resolution for me...can't quite put it in your meaning ... i especially like the "mature" life's acceptance of those kinds of challenges we run up against...the cheating, lying users ...or any "shocker' that befalls us ...and they certainly do ...as we are not so innocent ourselves eh!? ;))
E.

[Zoya]

Haha, you're right! We're just another bunch of 'people'. Thank you for your time and review, Einstein. I really appreciate it!

[Priyanshi]

Writing a poem gives a kind of relaxing and is a relief.....coming to your poem, absolute truth dear, that people are like seasons who keeps on changing....instead of rushing at the back of other, we must hold the ones who really loves and cares for us.
I really loved your poem, Zoe:))
just see once the last stanza's 2nd line....i didn't get it's meaning

[Zoya]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Priaynshi. I appreciate you reading and reviewing this poem of mine :)
As for the line, it just means that people will give millions of reasons to sigh/cry. I'll just change sigh to cry. Hope that helps.

[Zoya]

..Give you*

[Priyanshi]

yeah, this will help to understand....
Always a pleasure to read your work:)

[Zoya]

.........:)