A Beautiful Revenge

A widow full of vanity,
Was the identity of Mrs.Cole.
Who from her late husband,
Inherited his fortune whole.

Living in a huge bungalow,
With servants at her feet.
Oh what a narcissist she was,
A total beauty freak!

And once it so happened,
Her make-up-kit vanished.
Accused a servant of the crime,
Whom she straightaway banished.

Years passed the same way,
She didn't change a bit.
While the dismissed attendant,
Plans of revenge he knit.

Ready to take some action,
To his family he bid goodbye.
Set for the widow's house,
An eye for an eye.

He stood outside the bungalow,
Under the moonless night.
Placed a ladder against the wall,
Fire of revenge did ignite.

Climbed up quietly and prudently,
With a knife tightly clutched.
Joy bubbled inside him,
As her room's window he touched.

On seeing her former servant,
Mrs.Cole gave a loud cry.
Then shouted in a squeaky tone,
"Oh my, oh my!"

The predator inched closer,
Flaunting the sharp knife.
"Stop!" said the widow,
The deceased Mr.Cole's wife.

"Move forward another step?"
She continued, "Don't you dare!
Kill me only when,
I'm done settling my hair."

Author's Note

Nonsense, maybe.

Reviews

[ZakLeonRamsey]

I wouldn't say it is nonsense, this is my favourite poem so far on Writerscafe.org. I haven't been on this website for long, about a week or less, but I really like this poem and I find it really catchy. I'm not a professional, I'm far from a professional, but what I can say, is that this poem is BRILLIANT. The way it rhymes makes this poem even better. It is really catchy, (for the second time, I can't help but mention).
The poem is really long, but I didn't care, I was wanting to find out what the attendant was going to do to Mrs.Cole. I'm in love with this poetry which I call a masterpiece. I think you should write more like this, I love this poetry to bits. I REALLY wanted to find out what happened to Mrs.Cole, which was the thing that made me careless about how long this poem was. I was interested since the beginning. Quite a good poem, Zoe.

[Zoya]

Thank you much for your very kind words. Really appreciate it!

[Sawdust]

great work
the end particularly was great.
the only flaw i felt was lack of practicality.
nevertheless, well done

[Zoya]

Well, I respect your review, but you should look for imagination and creativity rather than practicality out here :)
Thank you for your time!

[Sawdust]

never to forget,
the wine of thoughts tastes best in a cup of realistic observation.

[Zoya]

Opinions differ :)

[Elizabeth]

The end completely threw me of. Great storytelling mixed with subtle wit indeed makes a wonderful poem.

[Zoya]

Thanks again, DarkMist! I do appreciate :)

[Elizabeth]

You're welcome :)

[Cadel]

I think not much is more important in a persons writing than a sense of humor, and you certainly aren't lacking.

[Zoya]

Thank you for your time and kind review :)

[BlackPrince]

You show great skill and promise as a story-teller.
Your words flow smoothly, with the rhymes coming across smoothly whilst the story effortlessly flows forward effortlessly, with an added dialogue, with your word choice, diction, tone, vocabulary and grammar being correct all the way; and it's all packed with deep truth and meaning. And there's an outstanding sense of humour I notice in the final stanza: 'Kill me only when,
I'm done settling my hair.'

You have a serious talent.
YOU ARE A POET!!
KEEP IT UP!!!

WELL DONE

[Zoya]

Thank you for your kind words here! I appreciate it :)

[Sami Khalil]

Tragedy, suspense and humor all woven together and with great imagination. You are talented.

[Zoya]

Thanks a lot! Means much to me :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly.

[Sonakshi Arora]

I love how the entire plot of the poem unveils one by one and the sudden, abrupt and unexpected change at the end! This was a wonderful piece and very satirical indeed. Keep it up my friend.

(Also I'm in love with your rhyme scheme and thematic poetries 💖)

[Zoya]

Oh thanks a lot, Sonakshi! I appreciate your kind words :)

[matrixmark]

Wickedly comical, yet very thrilling at the same time. Even though it was a poem (as you know this is not my forte) I read it as a short story. Absolutely superb use of the imagination and, a very funny climax to such a well built thrilling build up. Your combinational skills of adding comedy to seriousness are flawless in this piece. I know hard how it is to do such a thing, but when you pull it off, it sure feels good. So, so pleased I read this piece, as I am of all your pieces.

It was different, and different is always good in my book.

A mighty fine comedy thriller you have written here. Many kudos points from me to you.

Mark.

[Zoya]

Thank you very much for your kind words, Mr. Mark! I appreciate the reviews!

[Rye]

Very intersting read, glad I clicked on this and read it, love the ending...

[Zoya]

Thank you much for your review! I appreciate it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting tale. I did like the ending. Need to look pretty when death comes. Thank you Zoe for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Zoya]

Thank you so much, Coyote! You and your thoughts here are much appreciated :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.