What a choice! To stay or go, knowing that taking either path will lead to a death of some sort; either stay and risk a death at violent hands by an abusive person or leave and risk the death of the relationship. Very clever. And a perfect haiku form!
An excellent first attempt. Well Done!
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you so very much, Doodley! That was a perfect interpretation. Glad you liked it.
A good haiku, Zoe. The ying and yang of love. I would say I like that you are experimenting with different poetic forms. That's how you grow. For a first attempt this is good.
What a choice! To stay or go, knowing that taking either path will lead to a death of some sort; either stay and risk a death at violent hands by an abusive person or leave and risk the death of the relationship. Very clever. And a perfect haiku form!
An excellent first attempt. Well Done!
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you so very much, Doodley! That was a perfect interpretation. Glad you liked it.
Good attempt. I want to say that this is not a haiku.
It consists of 5 7 5 syllables.
First line has 7
Second 13
Third 7
It seems that modern poets are not following that rule, so I think it is okay. To a conclusion, I wouldn't call this a perfect haiku.
Don't let my words discourage you, I know I am being a bit harsh, I know that you are very talented and that I why I want you to know about the format of a haiku.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Uh-oh, I get it. Thank you much for telling me about it. Ill correct it and post it again!
7 Years Ago
Now it is perfect. Good job.
7 Years Ago
Thank you!
7 Years Ago
Zoe no need to worry. I always welcome comments like this to correct our mistakes. Most of the peopl.. read moreZoe no need to worry. I always welcome comments like this to correct our mistakes. Most of the people hear won't give true review . So appreciate it
Najam i like your attitude.
7 Years Ago
You make me smile😊
7 Years Ago
I always appreciate true reviews :)
7 Years Ago
@ Najam . What makes you smile. I am darn serious.
7 Years Ago
The fact that you like my attitude, I thought my words would hurt Zoe.
7 Years Ago
Be assured, they did not. Im just glad you told me about it!
Anytime, Zoe. Only because I believe that you have immense talent I felt like telling you to make yo.. read moreAnytime, Zoe. Only because I believe that you have immense talent I felt like telling you to make you perfect with the form. ☺
I am happy that you took my words in a positive way :)
7 Years Ago
Thank you again, Najam, for your read and review. I truly appreciate it :)