Love Is Dangerous

Love Is Dangerous

A Poem by Zoya
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My first haiku.

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A gun to my head,
Keep by his side? I will die,
Move on? Death again.

© 2017 Zoya


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Love the dualism here, Zoe.

What a choice! To stay or go, knowing that taking either path will lead to a death of some sort; either stay and risk a death at violent hands by an abusive person or leave and risk the death of the relationship. Very clever. And a perfect haiku form!

An excellent first attempt. Well Done!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you so very much, Doodley! That was a perfect interpretation. Glad you liked it.



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Well, That was utterly dangerous and beautiful at the same time

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your time and review!
A good haiku, Zoe. The ying and yang of love. I would say I like that you are experimenting with different poetic forms. That's how you grow. For a first attempt this is good.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Ted! Means a lot.
Well done. It's so short, but says so much. Keep it up Zoe.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you much, Avia!
what a situation to be placed in damn if you do ! and damn if you don`t

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you, wordman! I appreciate it.
Thrilling. I love the imagery

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thanks much for your time and review. Appreciated!
Cleverly written and executed. A good one.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you. I really appreciate it!
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

You are welcome.
I like the poem but I disagree with the idea of love presented here.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Zoya

7 Years Ago

I understand. I'm gonna change the title. It doesn't fit well. Thank you for reading!
Suhd

7 Years Ago

Pleasure !
this was well written
and good for your first haiku !!

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Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Pia! I appreciate your comment
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Love the dualism here, Zoe.

What a choice! To stay or go, knowing that taking either path will lead to a death of some sort; either stay and risk a death at violent hands by an abusive person or leave and risk the death of the relationship. Very clever. And a perfect haiku form!

An excellent first attempt. Well Done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you so very much, Doodley! That was a perfect interpretation. Glad you liked it.
Good attempt. I want to say that this is not a haiku.
It consists of 5 7 5 syllables.
First line has 7
Second 13
Third 7
It seems that modern poets are not following that rule, so I think it is okay. To a conclusion, I wouldn't call this a perfect haiku.
Don't let my words discourage you, I know I am being a bit harsh, I know that you are very talented and that I why I want you to know about the format of a haiku.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

Anytime, Zoe. Only because I believe that you have immense talent I felt like telling you to make yo.. read more
Zoya

7 Years Ago

Thank you again, Najam, for your read and review. I truly appreciate it :)
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

You are most welcome :)

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