Cut

Anger boils inside

no tears left behind

as the feelings shrivel away.

The blade slides across my skin

a river split open

spilling a velvety red trail

of torturous pleasure and pain

in the wake of insanity

it stills the tormented ponderings

of my poor abused mind

the demons within

have retreated for now

Author's Note

may be unfinished....you tell me?

Reviews

[lauren emily]

This is very powerful...I think it's fine the way it is. :)
Very nice write. Beautifully written. :)

~Lauren

[Sandy sunday]

Awesome! Thanks for the review on mine. About the part; of tortuous pleasure and pain.. i felt that it could be better as; the torturous pleasure of pain... a bit more dark :P But yours is still amazing, sort of made me miss my old friend.

[JRB]

It's ok with me, a tormented soul, nice write
Jan/Uisiom

[Evil_Angel]

Definitely describes cutting well, which i deeply hope that you dont do, but focusing on the poetry alone its beautiful although it makes me sorta sad too.

[QuietPoet]

This was so breathtaking. Its so powerful. But also sad.. Thanks for sending this my way.

[Chahklat]

I can understand the use of cutting as a release, temporary though.
A strong work of art that conveys feelings well.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very deep and powerful... the damaging effects of cutting is so very well described... I think it is just fine the way it is.