Pain

written when I was in high school

Tearing, ripping, searing pain,

wrenching, crying, sobbing his name.

Anger, sadness, hurt inside,

deceiving, hurting, painful lies.

Murder, dying, wrong doings,

fighting, sighing, always losing.

Alone, despair, when is life fair,

seething, burning, does anyone care?

Reviews

[Catastrophe]

i love the way you have written this poem, the rhyming pattern is
just so smooth
and there is so much impact in your lines..
yet the emotions come out so lightly, amazing.

[lauren emily]

You captured a lot of emotion in this poem, it made me feel really sorry for the narrator.
Very nice piece, though. Keep up the great work,
~Lauren

[Emza S]

Ohh. That's so sad! REally nice piece of work, though. (As always. ^^)