BORN IN YOUR BREATH

BORN IN YOUR BREATH

I see you.

Delicate curves of your
wanton smile part
to reveal the insatiable
dance of your tongue.

I pull you closer.

Your breath ascending
from the heart, dripping
honey, unclothing a bite
of lustful craving.

I embrace you.

My mouth seizing yours
with the moist of my lips,
burning back the fire
inside of you.

I taste you.

My tongue unfolds into
a song upon touching yours,
quenching my thirst
with your love.

I adore you.

Reborn in the breath
that lingers upon
your lips beneath
passionate eyes.

Author's Note

Awarded 2nd in the following contest:
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/So-you-got-what-it-takes%3F/12510/

Thank you for feedback should you leave it :)

Reviews

[Inkcognito]

The title is to die for - simply sublime!
I love the way you start this poem - "I see you" - such a beautiful, simple introduction but, you 'see' deeper, you want more ...I love how feelings, sensations, emotions follow, dressed in lust, sultry passion and tender sensuality...thoughts, like a trickle of honey poured onto smooth, warm skin, slowly making its way, leaving a lingering, sweet trail. (ohhhhhh...I could sooooo do with a kiss like that right now!!) Tantalizing, vivid imagery....YES! a super fabulous write!

[Ladysue]

I was sold on the title alone...what a wonderfully sensual, intimate piece...

[Loner]

A powerful passionate punch, a win , win all the way.
Such hot sizzling romance.

[Alicante lullaby]

a very nice,strong,passionate write...

[Brad]

you've got a great gift to describe yearning...hmm, very much like..van morrison

[Cafe Reader]

Really sensual writing! I like it!

[Jeffrey Gershom]

I can tell that you're a very sensual person from all of your poems. I really liked this poem. It is structured nicely and has an extremely intimate feel to it. The use of single lines reminds me of an appeitizer before the main course, and can be read as a poem inside a poem.
Nicely Done!

[AlieahRose]

I LIKE HOW...
WHILE I WAS READING THIS...
I FELT LIKE I WAS THERE...
I SUDDENLY GOT HOT...
AND WANTED THE POEM TO BE REALITY...
IT FELT LIKE IT WOULD BE...
THIS JUST PROVES HOW AMAZING...
OF A WRITTER YOU ARE...

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and strong poem of love. Each line making your poem message more powerful and meaningful. A outstanding poem of emotion and love. Thank you.
Coyote

[Marie Harrison]

Very sexy write. Your poem conjured images in my head of the art of french kissing. Made me want a breath mint too. Just the thought of being so close to smell one's breath. But the smell of one's breath is so sexy, especially with that first intimate kiss. Very memorable and lasting impression. Nice poem.