MAN-EATING EYES

She's a man eater ...

MAN-EATING EYES

It was a breath-easy day,
slightly overcast.
I sat on the patio and
ordered a double espresso.
Across from me sat a girl -
charm and allure
ever-so-present,
exuding from her like smoke...
yeah, she was HOT.
She looked my way,
modest, unassuming,
and that's when it started.

Her eyes arrested me
sending chills down
my spine, like the
butt of a gun pushing
and steering at my back.
They told a story of
screams hung in the night,
thousands of souls,
much like my own,
lost in the void
of her stillborn heart.

She continued to sip
her latte, her eyes locked
in on me ready to strike.
They consumed me like
the moon eclipses the sun;
the spears from within
etching her name
on my lips...it wasn't a name,
but a word...MAN EATER.

It WAS a nice day,
slightly overcast...

Author's Note

This was inspired by many of Crowley's poems.

Thanks for feedback should you leave any.

Reviews

[Bewitching Sensations]

MMMmmmm been there on a few occasions.. love the passion of this piece.. stirring .. alluring. Well done !!!!

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have we met? LOL

[lyssilou]

Wow you never doubt me with your writing. What i wonder is that you captivate and illustrate extremley well like you have had this expierience. But in your authors note i can see that you inspired by crowleys poems, or maybe thats a cover. HAHA! Anyway great write

[Brianna Brie]

They consumed me like
the moon eclipses the sun;
the spears from within
etching her name
on my lips...it wasn't a name,
but a word...MAN EATER.

Great concept with a powerful delivery. Not crazy about the last two lines though. They kind of just dangle there.

[Faraway Sado]

Pretty cool. This happened with me once. The difference was that i was the girl.

[AlieahRose]

I HAVE NEVER CALLED...
A POEM BEAST-MODE...
THIS POEM WAS...
DEFINATLY BEAST-MODE...
=]...

[zogzog]

nice....your way with words is great as usual.....

[Valentine]

The eyes speak volumes..some feelings are false...others sad, some true, it is all a guessing game amymore..Nice one..Kathie

[Liza]

man eating eyes; i like the title. man eater is a popular word; not so much woman eater :)

thought provoking write!

[Coyote Poetry]

Those Man Eater are out there. Woman who control and want the power. I like this poem. You took me to the cafe and to see this woman in your words. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote