COLLECTION OF HAIKU II

hai-ai-kuu

LOVE PUZZLE-BOX

A heart pried open -
Defusing intricacies
of the love within

COLD

Sedated to feel -
Mask uncovered blank stone eyes
screaming apathy

ILLUMINATED

Enslaved by the light -
Radiance filling my soul
kindling my spirit

VENUS LUSCIOUS

Memory of you -
Enticing against my mouth
a heaven’s blossom

Author's Note

Thank you for the feedback should you leave any and tell me which one you like the best.

Reviews

[Hellslastwarrior]

COLD
Sedated to feel -
Mask uncovered blank stone eyes
screaming apathy

I like the best personally, it calls out more to me than any of the others and it also reminds me of Lord of the Rings when Frodo looks into the dead eyes of that corpse and its white but you can think of all the thoughts and emotions that that dead person may have had.
Good work again mate- keep it up.
Ted.

[Denise Rivard]

I liked Love Puzzle Box best. " A heart pried open- diffusing intracacies of the love within" is apt. I've always found love to be like a puzzle, when the pieces fit together it's amazing but if you come up missing that one vital piece a corner of your heart remains unfullfilled. Nice work

[Ladysue]

wow, fantastic haiku's.. I like the first one a lot. i love the title of it too...Illuminated is stunning...all of them are exceptional...wonderful to read...

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I liked the first the best although they are really good..anyone who writes haiku's like this has talent..love puzzle box evokes such interesting images

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

you know how much i love your haiku collections... and anyone who could fit "intricacies" into a haiku has mad respect from me...

[Lovely Lady]

Well, I like the last... best. but I really think they all work together as series.

I do like the concept of the heart PRIED open... that made me stop, pause a moment to contemplation... before completion. I like it when poetry does that. Becomes memoral.

[Crowley]

Holllahhhhh!!!! These were fantastic. I like Illuminated best and like everyone else, Venus was superb. You really do a great job with these. Each one was great, and wierdly it was like four different emotions, probably intentional I guess, Love, apathy, spirituality and lust....love that combination.

[FocusedAmnesia]

Great pieces. If I had to pick, I think Illuminated would be my favorite... no Cold... I'm going to call it a tie. I can't pick one.

[c.m.]

VENUS LUSCIOUS
Memory of you -
Enticing against my mouth
a heaven’s blossom

Oh sweet Lord. I definitely like this one best!!!!!! But all in all, I liked each of them, and think they flow well together. Great as usual Ivan. Nice to have you back.

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

one haiku was a pit next was a pat, pit pat of a dying heart, loved it