ONE NIGHT

ONE NIGHT

One look of your eyes,
transforms my virtue
into a nymphomaniac.

One touch from you,
compels my skin to
stand up and applaud.

One kiss from you,
breathes sex into me,
making me rise.

One night with you,
baptizes me in sin,
resurrecting me unto God.

Author's Note

Reviews

[writing mojo]

Great flow to this poem, "applauding skin" is a very good image to suggest from thoughts, like goose bumps and lumps in the back of the throat, I have been the foresight of this poem many times before..this poem wears a cloak all the way to the last line...lol after a night vision like that i don't know if god would be the right entity to see. good stuff

[ForTheWorld]

nice poem, brilliant write, can't deny that this poem is heavenly great... =D

[Matthew Kong]

baptize me in sin, love that phrase! amazing!

[Hellslastwarrior]

Baptise me in sin- what an exelent line loved this poem it calls out to me but i cant seem to put my finger on how lol.
Ted

[Colleen Hitchcock]

Hi, Flawed,

Invictus is stunning, but so is your writing! I'll come back to read more,
but One Night is sexy, powerful and how wonderful to feel a male power in
dynamic words. Congratulations!

[JustAlex]

mmm i think its short but a beautiful story that it tells
which i hate that its short cause i didnt want the story to end
sensualy intense and passionate well done

[DamienHino]

Intense lover I liked it...I think it was a little short could have details about her fragrance, or voice. Otherwise it does tell a story of lovemaking.

[Natalie]

I think the length was fine and in my opinion it tells a story. Nice peice. I liked how you used the words to get the story across.

[Brad]

hells no, this is enough...whew! i like your references between spiritual nirvana and love...this one leaves the reader breathless

[dovetailer]

O, God...O, God...O, God...
in the hands of the right woman, we all cry unto the Almighty
very nice piece...the poem and the subject of it...
it's not the size of the poem, it's the motion of the ocean...LOL