OCEAN'S THE WOMAN THAT IS YOU

OCEAN’S THE WOMAN THAT IS YOU

Woman of fashion draped in blue,
erasing footsteps in the sand.
Seducing toes with lapping waves;
caressing earth in your expanse.

Sun adorns your indigo face,
glistening heaven on the skin,
as light-rays penetrate the soul;
revealing the secrets within.

You dance on the songs of the wind;
twisting, breaking to the rhythm
of roaring currents in your breast,
as your pearls echo ocean’s hymn.

Many have ventured to your heart,
lost in the waves of your desire;
in the abyss of coral reefs,
encompassed by deepest sapphire.

Wash me over with your sea waves.
Embrace me in your mystic blue.
Let me sink to depths of your soul;
I want to feel you through and through.

Graced by soft cerulean robes,
breathing turquoise of the sky’s hue;
I give in to your warm embrace.
Ocean’s the woman that is you.

Author's Note

This is in response to Linda Marie Van Tassell's "The Ocean Is A Woman" which can be found here http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/linmarvan/331042/

After reading her piece I was inspired and she was gracious enough to allow me to write a poem akin to hers using a different structure and rhyme scheme.

***PLEASE TAKE THE TIME TO READ BOTH POEMS BEFORE COMMENTING - This poem is not meant to be better than the original, but I hope it is a worthy companion to it :)

Winner of the following contest:
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Poetry-Makes-the-World-Go-Round/11602/

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

This is a very good companion piece to the originial poem, written with wit and skill. The good flow makes it all the more enjoyable. There are many great lines to quote. Needless to say, I really enjoyed reading this poem, and, as I have had the privilege of knowing the inspiration behind this write very well, I can safely say that it does justice to the poet's intention :)
Great job once again!

[Adelia Alighieri]

Linda Marie Van Tassell's "The Ocean Is A Woman" and your poem make a very elegant connection towards the end. I find V.Tassell's work very inspiring - it adds so much beauty to itself by comparing a mere ocean to a woman. Yours is fine work, it reflects your inspiration. A great response. Kudos.

[QuietPoet]

This was very beautiful I enjoyed reading it. Such passion and I had the image in my head, nicely written :)

[Phibby Venable]

Many have ventured to your heart,
lost in the waves of your desire;
in the abyss of coral reefs,
encompassed by deepest sapphire.

Such fine lines. A very photographic & wonderful piece
of writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

The ocean is beautiful. Only way we can describe the great ocean is with woman and her beauty. I'm a great fan of the ocean. The poem description and detail made your words come alive. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Ivan,

I am honored that my poem inspired you and even more so that you took the time and energy to write a companion poem.

I think you did a much better job of personifying the ocean as a woman in the physical sense as your descriptives are very tangible. I think my poem focused more on equating the ocean to the internal emotions, love, spirit, et al of a woman. Combined, both the spiritual and the physical are joined together. While distinctly different from one another, the two poems compliment one another nicely; and I personally adore the juxtaposition of the female and male perspectives, the masculine and the feminine.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

It's beautiful

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

i've just read the other piece (as instructed - shock of all shocks, i sometimes actually do as i'm told! ;))

i love the inversion of her poem into yours, like a kernel within a kernel.

you've managed to capture that same fluidity, but in a style that is all yours, and an unmistakably masculine voice.

i have one favourite stanza:

"You dance on the songs of the wind;
twisting, breaking to the rhythm
of roaring currents in your breast,
as your pearls echo ocean’s hymn."

just so lovely..