SUBLIME

SUBLIME

Gazing into your clear night eyes,
Is like staring at the lucid stars,
Lost in the precious moment,
Wishing it would forever last,

A blind mime said to me once,
To hang on to times like these,
Serene and adolescent pure,
Too few and far between,

“Give in to your desires”, he said,
Kiss her gentle, silky smooth skin,
Raise her to dance amidst the clouds,
Set her body and mind ablaze,

Make her tremble in ecstasy,
Hold her tight in your warm embrace,
Let her come back down to earth,
A night neither of you will forget.

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

You've painted this poem with a lot of emotions, and it shows!

"Raise her to dance amidst the clouds"
is a particularly eye catching sentence, in a poem full of eye catching sentences.

I wouldn't say there is much to be criticized in this write, but the meter could probably have been better, which would have added to the aesthetics of the write.

Very well done!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Love, in its purest form, is transcendental and truly has the ability to lift one to another plane - a pleasure parallel of existence. You have captured the essence of love's beauty in your words - a truth that no man will forget.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

[Awdures]

A teasing of emotion between two adults to be held on to in memory form, and now in poetic repose. To be fair I agree that there is not much to be criticised here. I rather enjoy that you are pushing the boundaries with the meter, even though you have not used form it flows amicably, and the message is certainly clear.

I love the line "raise her to dance amidst the clouds" sexy but not too risqué. Thoroughly enjoyed the write. Keep them coming ;)

[Breezie Kae]

So much emotion, and a great message. Seize the day. :)

[zogzog]

romantic

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

harmonious silken dance of lovers ~ truly lovely~