____ Another year, Gosh ____

Well, definitely not a haiku...tried but aaghhh...am not an expert so!!!

Everyone had the cake

He lives another year

 

I need to puke

 

Reviews

[Helena]

Hahaa, I've just read all the other reviews. You have everyone guessing about this one. I guess we can all put our own interpretation on it and never really get to the bottom of it! I loved the kind of short and crisp kind of shock feature of this.....it was good!

Yes I liked this little piece,( not cake! ) of writing lol! Didn't seem like a very nice cake at that, if everyone had to puke after it!!

Seriously though.....add a couple of more words here and there and make it :

1st line 5 syllables

2nd line 7 syllables

3rd line 5 syllables ~ Then you have your Haiku my friend!

Know it all aren't I? Hope it helps! rotfl

KIndest regards

Helena :) :)

OH......AND HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!

[April Child]

Hahaha come on Flaw, get over it, it's your damn birthday, smile, let us celebrate you were born. Oh go on then take a puke, what's a puke between friends...

Happy Bloody Birthday!

[Ju Ju]

I agree with that
I am not to big on birthdays
I love this
It's blunt
and honest

[None]

You leave one wondering so much...is the author bulimic? Do they like the birthday person? Was the cake bad? I just love this...your three lines leave much to consider. A great little haiku or senryu....Extra special!

[Molly]

Ha ha, I like this. The succinctness was refreshing.

[Red_Queen]

I love poems like this.
the ones that are short and just leave you wondering what exactly it was about.