____ For Once ____

 

I am walking on a beach
The raising tides out of reach
I stopped and took some sand
But you just slipped through my hand

Somewhere deep in my heart’s dune
A flute makes a lonely tune
The song is new, the melody is old
Words that whisper your name in cold

With the winds against my face
I searched for your trace
There far away in the sea
There was the sign, you looked at me

Rising and falling, tides of glee
I felt your presence near me
And for once I thought I had
Found the melody which‘ll never evade

But within the next, you were gone
I was left, on my own.
I cursed, I cried
And thus again, I died.

I live and die every day
Since I knew you’ll never stay
I lick my wounds and tear my clay
But only for you, to run away

Oh but for once, come to me
Come and lift my agony
Oh for once, my quest, for once be mine
And let my gloomy heart to shine

But just as the sands slipping away
I know very well, you’ll also sway
And I know I’ll always strive
For that single word named life.

Reviews

[None]

I feel your sadness and pain here, the longing for one who isn't all there with you. What a beautiful and endearing poem that shows such love and emotion. This is incredible and I'm keeping this in my favorites!

[An Ordinary Woman]

I hardly know what to say, this is so poignant and written so beautifully. I am amazed at the smoothness in which you were able to carry the rhyme and still hold a strong and powerful message. It stuns me when I come across someone with this ability, so often the rhyme takes away, but not so here.

I was able to relate to this piece too, which just adds to its specialness as far as I'm concerned. I've only visited the sea once and it just happened to be with a love from long ago and he isn't among us anymore. :+(

This really touched me today.

[Marjorie]

This is very intense and beautiful. Emotions shared are worth feeling, however much painful to us they can be. By passing this on, you give inspiration to many. I thank you for that wonderful gift and hope that you keep offering it to the site. Very nice written.

[Sel Whiteley]

This is stunningly emotive, flaw and I really relate to how life can seem like a lonely stroll on the beach. I like the freedom in the words and the truly evocative and yet classical lines such as:

A flute makes a lonely tune
The song is new, the melody is old

You show a good command of sonics and rhyme. Nice write.

[Middagslapie]

The sea has always been very precious to me. Tis why this piece has touched me deep my friend. And yes, there is always hope even when the world goes gray.

Rising and falling, tides of glee
I felt your presence near me

Beautiful sensation this.. connection the yearning with something that does not remain constant...

Ur a wonderful poet and u know it! lol!

me*

[Jaclyn]

This is really beautiful...I loved it. You're not giving up on yourself even though you're miserable over this person. Good job!

[rachel D]

okay, your work does NOT suck. i liked this poem a great deal. there are some real great lines. and the end is very heartfelt. it's what we are all looking for. this poem is universal which is something i think a lot of my poems lack because they tend to have too many personal details that others may have no clue what i am talking about. so i have a lot of respect for someone who can write a poem like this. my favorite lines are as follows:

I live and die every day
Since I knew you'll never stay
I lick my wounds and tear my clay
But only for you, to run away

i just noticed that was what brianna quoted too- haha. anyways, it's a great little group. i like the visual of licking your wounds. keep writing- you're good at it!

[Brianna Brie]

live and die every day
Since I knew you'll never stay
I lick my wounds and tear my clay
But only for you, to run away

I just love the rhyme you have going in your work this being no exception. I must be old fashioned, because I really prefer this type of poem. The flow just makes it easy for me to read and get caught up in. My heart broke a little bit when I hit the verse above. Loved it.

[Lydia Shutter]

A beautifully written "love lost" poem. I liked the imagery of the sea. Very effective. Lydia